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Dewpoint

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There's
no stopping
no blocking.
No way of denying
this freefall of feeling
~'~
Heart captured
Soul raptured
Finding one
of like mind
in language
refined
Entranced
from the start
such clarity of heart
in crystal creations
crafted with care
of one gentle spirit
exceptionally rare
With precision
concision
quietly
unfolding
dropping
dewdrops
of
words
on
pearl
petal
pages
of
clear
mystic
minds


'

 Drown - Stuart Davis [song audio]

Author notes

[water drop: song 'Drown' - heard after writing]

For the best compliment and complement from JoyBeingNow, read: "Inspired" allpoetry.com/poem/857373


Written October 17th, 2004

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  • Kari gold member
    October 28, 2006
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    deep

    This is so very deep...I can even here this like a song playing in the back of my mind even more so the first parts. The best of luck to you in the contest huney

    Kari

  • verses on flesh
    September 20, 2006
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    You know I adore your writing endlessly. Your words are like a haven I continuously find myself wanting to climb into. I really love the way you toyed with sounds in this piece, I think the way each word reads where it is placed in a poem can make or break the write. You know how picky I get even to the distruction of grammar to suit flow. xD! I can't really give a critical critique here because there is little I could offer to make it better. I can however tell you that your word usage and layout were two of my favorite parts. Thank you so much for entering and helping me celebrate my one year!

    jamie


  • bludstaindsoliloquy
    March 1, 2006
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    wonderful alliteration with:

    "dropping
    dewdrops"

    "pearl
    petal
    pages"

    and

    "mystic
    minds"

    One can tell that there was a lot of thought put behind your stucture . . . not only do your words show the passion but your format does as well! Awesome write! Good luck!

    Maggie

  • Poet-treeman
    September 21, 2005
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    "What waters flow from deep within, what living pool eternal spring what the world cannot construe is crystallized inside of you"


  • SusanL
    February 17, 2005
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    Ok so I came to find a random inspiring poem and in one click.... I fould what I wanted.
    I can go to bed now.. I have been staring at this for about 15 minutes, mesmerized not just by the verse itself, but at the structure and the flow and your ability to stand single words on a line and have it say something.
    Ok one more look at this lovely piece..........................................
    yep yep yep!
    You got me good with this one.
    Susan
    Edited on Feb 17, 2:07 because 'well it is late and I should not be typing'.

  • imjusbnme
    February 7, 2005
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    I really loved reading this. It is very well done. The words flowed from the page straight to the heart. I really enjoyed it the flow. Excellent write.


  • InsaneAlice
    January 21, 2005
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    This is beautiful! It's gorgeous. It's so unique in style. Your choice of words is brilliant, and it's conjures up some beautiful images. Your love is so obvious in this piece. I love the 'freeness' of it. As if you just can't cntain your emotions and feelings - you just have to get them out, anyway you can. I LOVE it!
    Please forgive me
    Ali xx

  • Whisper
    January 4, 2005
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    Stylish indeed! This gorgeous piece displays the mind's borderless expanse, the heart's inner gentility and the soul's spiritual exuberance, wrapped in the beauty of natural passion and limitless love...

    Excellent writing...


  • leo2
    December 28, 2004
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    Beautiful

    Pure magic has condensed on this page. I liked the form and well, the message is no less than fantastic. Love is grand when you can find someone like this to share it with.

    Regards,
    Leo Long
    ps. Thanks for reading and commenting on my work.


  • ColinSJones
    December 26, 2004
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    astounding visual piece ..well it was visual for me maybe it is my third eye


  • Maatkara gold member
    October 25, 2004
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    Aaw, thank you J I'm so glad it touched you. Never give up hope though, "Love Comes from the most unexpected places", as that song goes by Kim Carnes.

    ~ G


  • Judas Denied
    October 25, 2004
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    This is nice. lol That may sound paltry and insincere, but I sighed when I finished it. Such a genuinely honest piece without all the fluff one tends to find in "love" category poems. I applaud you for that. lol And I have to say, this is like reading the one thing I always wanted to find in real life. I ramble. Just let me say, gratz, you are a lucky lady.


  • BillS2
    October 21, 2004
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    Beautiful

    Hi Gennelle:
    It better not be a work in progress. Leave it alone! It is very well written and beautiful as currently expressed. I really enjoyed this write and found it full of spirit and meaning. Thank you for this lovely write. Bill


  • thelastknight silver member
    October 21, 2004
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    I love this type of writing. I have used it from time to time. It's about the only way I can really tap into my deep thoughts and feelings. Great job and so well presented. Thanks for sharing. I'm glad I found your page. Sincerely, David


  • duana
    October 20, 2004
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    aw. This flows so beautifully as the message. Refined Purity. I just love this. It makes my heart ache. This is true art. My eyes are opening to true poetry after just one lesson in 'word usage'. And yours is perfectly crafted.


  • Sharon Corr gold member
    October 18, 2004
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    Beautifully Penned within grace and elegance!
    Je’tadore you shine light through the dark shores in all our lives!

    Dewpoint of our soul
    Reminds me of the wisdom of old
    Tender in your colours and hues
    Of freefalling neon blue

    My Dear Sweet Gennelle you embrace all of art and poetry within your tender heart.
    I’m walking insight with you as one upon the road to paradise.
    You see within angel eyes. The first time I read this divine song.
    I was speechless and then I had to slap myself silly to awaken the muse within me.
    Just to view the elegance of the lily floating aglow beyond the darkness lights my inner heart.
    You have a way to shine light beyond the darkness day nigh midnight..

    This song chimes true within my secret life
    I smile when I find one of like mind
    This is a gift from angels so sublime.
    As all our heartstrings skip as one through time.
    If only we can freefall like this deep kiss through our entire lives
    Knowing wrong from right
    As one dewdrop of love from hearts of light
    I am found in rewind upon the Dewpoint of our soul in one heavenly paradise.

    As dewdrops appear on your silken skin so near
    Dewdrops free falling upon our hearts reminding us your here
    Leading us up
    To the atmosphere of love.
    Mystic wisdom of old flows from your pen within Pure Lands of Paradise
    You share a connection to the stars and the faith that in the rebirth is the light
    Within all our hearts
    Golden soft cerise petals of love touching the skies in your sighs
    Reflections of gentle pure spirit within your misty eyes


  • Maatkara gold member
    October 17, 2004
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    Thank you so much, Myra! Wonderful, literary comment and spot on with the 'dewpoint'.

    ~ Gennelle


  • Ladybug
    October 17, 2004
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    the one worded piece makes a great parralell to the simple pleasures found in our world and life today....

    nice job
    Tamara


  • myrataal silver member
    October 17, 2004
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    Pst. I decided to use both l and ll to sooth both English AND American linguists




  • myrataal silver member
    October 17, 2004
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    Clear Crystallization

    Dearest Gennelle

    Nothing but a perfect reflection of the true image ... and the True Image. As indicated by the title, Dewpoint, this crystalization of thoughts from mind to mind, within its freshness and originality, reaches a point of saturation when it pours itself into realization and recognition. Ah. And the page which soaks up this soulful dropity-drip? Nothing but the clear mystic mind.

    Wonderful elixer, this dewdrop - not even a slip 'twix goblet and lip!


  • MargaretG
    October 17, 2004
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    Gorgeous

    The only thing I would ask you to consider is changing the double negatives in the first stanza into positives. On the other hand, that may make the fall too precipitous!
    The second stanza is completely lovely.
    M


  • quietly burning
    October 17, 2004
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    well done

    if u can think of any changes I would be amazed. This is totally beautiful as is ...... yes the form was free falling like the flow of words .... picture is wonderful


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 17, 2004
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    Weighlessness...

    "Quietly unfolding dewdrops of words on pearl petal pages" - what a beautiful image, what beautiful word art this is, Gennelle! Loved the feeling of weightlessness, of free-falling into bliss! Indeed nothing like falling into the one of like mind and soul - oh, lovely feelings of anticipation weaved throughout this poem! Beautiful!

    ~ Nicolette

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