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No! I scream.

No! I scream.
Mama, please don't make me?
She takes me by the hand
and leads me forward.
I am struggling
tyring to get away.
The more I struggle
the harder she pulls.
No! Mama Please
I am crying, No more.
It is to late I can already
feel the tightening
around my neck.
My struggling gets me nowhere.
I open my eyes and I see
all the sharp objects.
Mama looks to me with a smile
and saids; "Don't worry
having your hair cut won't hurt."

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Written October 16th, 2004

A contest entry

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  • fathom me
    November 3, 2004
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    got me scared and wondering till i reached the last 2 lines allright!
    haha!
    enjoyed reading it!
    great idea to write about a child's first hair cut!!

    luv n luk,
    kunjal.


  • J Rhys Davies
    October 30, 2004
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    Yep, haircuts are some of the scarier things in life, especially for the follicly challenged like me. I enjoyed this one and the twist was just nice.

    ~ John


  • rufina caraid gold member
    October 30, 2004
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    Love this one. Took me back 20+ years to my son's first hair cut - Painful for both of us. The twist we were expecting is there and the whole poem is very good.
    Thanks you for entering and good luck.
    ~Von~

  • Willow
    October 28, 2004
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    I still remember my sons' first hair cuts. They went in kicking and screaming. Thanks for the flash-back Thanks for entering and welcome to Allpoetry.

    ~Willow~


  • Damien 666
    October 25, 2004
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    lol good poem good lil twist there gud luck wit the contest
    kelvin


  • October 24, 2004
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    Very, very good, can relate to this with my son! Well thought out! Good luck in the contest, Ann


  • Ava Noire silver member
    October 22, 2004
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    Hair cut, dentist, the dr. all those things can scare a child. I still hate going to the dentist though...shudders anyway - this was enjoyable readin'


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    October 21, 2004
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    ROFLOL
    Always saw this on televison and now have witnessed it at the beauty shop
    Why do little ones cry
    LOL
    Ty for entering and good luck in the contest
    Susan~~~


  • NurseHayley
    October 17, 2004
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    lol why di kids hate having their hair cut? Maybe it is the fear of pain you spoke about in this poem! A wonderful entry, very real and made me chuckle.
    Good luck and thnaks for entering
    Hayley x x


  • RedRoseSpiral
    October 16, 2004
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    Nice poem. It is really cute.


  • Despairkitty
    October 16, 2004
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    This is a really good poem!!! I am thinking about entering this contest, but I really think that yours is going to be hard to beat!!

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