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Lover Boy




I may be just a boy to you
But a man I'll surely be
My heartstrings strum gentle too
I may be just a boy to you

Your angel eyes so bright and blue
I'd drift the shores with thee
I may be just a boy to you
But a man I'll surely be

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Innocent Love~
Written October 15th, 2004

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  • Aurora Ceres
    August 5, 2007

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    Awww Yes, this is such an innocent, loving piece.  You gentle spirit shines through here, so very much. Beautiful penning, my dear. Always a joy getting lost in you.

    Bella


  • blueangel4u
    December 14, 2004
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    Excellent!

    This is so cute and adorable, I love this Triolet, and how sweet it is to have love and to show love like you and your son both do, thanks for sharing, and keep on writing cuz!

    -Me


  • duana
    October 16, 2004
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    This made me smile. How nice!


  • Delphinidae
    October 15, 2004
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    What!? Your 'little' boy has a girl already? How old is he now? LOL. Must be a charmer, just like his Dad. This is a sweet triolet, with excellent flow. I enjoyed the sentiment behind it.

    Thank you for entering my contest.
    Christine


  • stridor
    October 15, 2004
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    I like this it kind of seems to me like he is in love with an older woman who blows off his affections. Those can really hurt

  • IceNinechick
    October 15, 2004
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    Very nice; I'm so jealous of your ability to write this form...I have pages of failed villanelles ( I actually haven't tried the triolet). Wonderful sentiment, and gorgeous phrasing. I love it.
    Becky


  • Ashley Mosely
    October 15, 2004
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    this is sweet-i have a tendency to say short poems are sweet without really thinking about what 'sweet' means. but this really is sweet, theres an innocence here that i like. great write


  • Georges silver member
    October 15, 2004
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    Very Good

    Short, but not like life would appear to the boy. When we grow "to be a man", life shortens and goes quicker. Nice wee poem showing youngsters desires to grow up faster, unlike Peter Pan. Nice......

  • nellymichelle
    October 15, 2004
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    Short and sweet...nice write...I am glad that I am the first person to cooment on this lovely poem.......You're right,when we miss our past years some time or the other for it brings back some sweet memories....To think of it,when we were a teenager,we always want to grow up fast and now that we are grown up,we miss our teenage life....
    Good write.....kepp writing

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