As love’s flame rekindled, shines bright
It shows the passion in our eyes
I hold you in my arms ever so tight
As love’s flame rekindled, shines bright
I profess this love with all my might
Everyone will witness this with sighs
As love’s flame rekindled, shines bright
It shows the passion in our eyes
Author notes
This is my second Triolet. I did this one all by myself. This will not be my last. My thanks will forever go out to SusanL who got me turned on to them.
Written October 14th, 2004
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Grows in beauty as you read...
I like the arrangement. The choice of words is simple, and the meter is not quite fluid, but rather than stumbling, the poem grows on you. It is a joy to repeat in one's head, like a mantra.
A beautiful mantra, no less. 
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great write, hope to read more~vickie
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i love your message, youre so poetic
i'll be bookmarking this!
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i love this one and read it evey day
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great it's my 2nd time reading this ..absolutely thrillng .keep it up
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thank you very much for your comment
i LOVE your writing.. i love the simple stuff that just speaks volumes
can't wait to read more! -sam -
Great flow and imagery in this piece! I liked it a lot! Great emotion of love fills the earth...Have a great day!
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I loved the way your described the flame and it was just beautiful. It felt like it was personal and it had a lot of power behind it. The words you used were perfect, it was simply beautiful
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This was an extaordinary write it seems like you took a good time writing this and you you can tell the strong emotion in every word
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Touching
I love the inter action betweeen the words and the repetition of words, making a lovely proclamation of love
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You almost got me...you almost got my eyes to well up...this poem just kinda brushes the surface to something I'm going through right now. This is full of heart, and speaking from living it, if you ever have love, let it go and then rekindle it...don't ever no matter what let it escape you again.
omnia vincit amor
Sinceritamente,
Venomous Scorpio
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well written ... flows... but i didnt feel anything... nothign wrong with that.. maybe its just me... i like to read poetry that are very heartfelt
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Quite well done Davis. I've never read any of your stuff before, but it's good.
Angel23
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Very good.
Beautifully written..it goes with the flow..Like the others I have never heard of Triolet form before but it doesn't matter because what you've got here is so wonderfully written that people are going to fall in love with this poem.it seems that you are a romantic person,just like me...hehehe...Most of my poems are on love...my friends call my hopeless romantic but when I show this poem to them they are going to call you that...hehehe....
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ive also never heard of a triolet before
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keep writing
wow- this form was perfect for expressing te feelings you have-great job, keep writing -
Loved It!
I too have never heard of triolet form before. But I sure enjoyed this write. Just beautiful John. The flow was excellent and as always you did an awesome job. But you always do a great job. Alexis
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I love this, I've never tried this form...but it's just lovely.
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awww how sweet, you certainly do have a way with words dont you! As far as the form you did a good job on it I myself have never tried such a form.
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Beautiful poem....I don't know a damn thing about Triolets...but it seems to flow nicely. I think the repeating adds something to it...and the feelings seem to flow from it...great job especially for a second attempt -
Beautiful!
I love these powerful lines, and your words flow ever so beautiful my fellow poet! Thanks for sharing, and a lovely triolet indeed!
-Timothy
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Lovely, passionate feelings, so lyrically expressed. Nice.
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you are damn good with professing love ...i hope you love love like you write.it's som wonderful and inspiring
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I have never heard of a Triolet before, but I am now intrigued. This is a beautiful piece, not the kind of mush... I mean, love poetry that makes me gag, but makes me smile. Which I needed. Thanks for sharing
I think I shall now research triolets... interesting...
Rock On!
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Poetic flame..
Beautiful write! I have looked at triolets before but have not tried my hand at it - you sure make me want to, dear poet! Indeed I sigh when witnessing this "2nd attempt" - great job. To me this is the sign of a great poet - fearlessly persuing all the different poetry styles! Much enjoyed!
Nicolette
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This is totally awesome. I really love triolet poems. I got started with them when I was a freshman in highschool. I love getting to read them. Awesome job.
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very good
Guess that makes me a grandfather having turned Susan onto them.
Very well done. You have a smoothness to your refrains that helps to make them lose their redundancy.
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Cool. Pretty powerful for a shorter type of poem. That's always promising and I'm glad you've just started writing this type, that means they'll gt even better! Wow, could that happen? Anyway, thanks for sharing!
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Oh Excellent!
very well done indeed.
Love is what makes the world go round
and when you're in it the world is a much brighter place...
Great piece..
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..good job ...as always...you have some kind of talent there...i've heard of the triolet only in passing..this one of yours has inspired me to find out more...GOd BLess
tyler
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this is a new form of poetry to me but i like the repitition which i take is part of the form ..it serves to emphsise the love you feel for this person. v v good
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I wouldn't have known a Triolet if I'd fallen over one John - but I like this very much - I can now see where the 'trio'part comes in but maybe I haven't paid any attention before reading this.
It's lovely
~Von~
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Oooooh, I love the rekindled thing here! It is like exciting and you can "feel" that in reading this piece! I have noooo idea about triolet, but this is exceptionally great! Great job here!!
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I l o v e Tirolets...I l o v e them. sigh and this is one of the most beautiful I have read on here. You have inspired me to write one- thanks...
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Yes, Susan is an awesome friend and then some. She has really helped me through a lot in the past months. And not just in poetry. Anytime you need help with this, I would be honored to lend my newly acquired knowledge to you.
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This is very beautiful John. So uhhh.... now that you are getting the hang on this thing, I can count on you to share the lessons learned right? Kinda pay it forward thing.
I love the way this flows and sounds by the way. You had an awesome teacher!
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WooHoo!!!
If I had not just dumped all my points into a contest I would feature this!
You have such poetic talent that a form sugh such as this suits you well.
I will applaud this though....
Yeah!!!
Susan
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