Fear
like a plague
it seeps through the door
It fills the room
Closes around you
blinds you
clouds your judgement
makes you cower in the corner
head between your knees
hoping it doesn't get you
But it will
Oh it will
it will come when you least expect it
It will hide in your mind
Until your asleep
then strike
you sit up in bed
But you dare not sleep
for it will strike again
like a stubborn snake
It is a plahue with no cure
Except Death
Author notes
Written October 14th, 2004
A contest entry
- Scare us with a twist... (New Member Contest- October) by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended November 2, 2004, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I have to admit, I really liked this, but there is a little something missing at the end. What happened to the twist? Nonetheless it was a nicely written piece.
~ John
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bubba - we need a twist at the end - fear is a sicly feeling but our contest asks for a humourous twist to finish with a flourish.
You still have time.
Welcome to AP and thanks for your entry
~Von~ -
bubba - this is nicely done. I would suggest running it through a spell check as I noticed a misspelled word.
Fear completely surrounds you and can control you if your defenses are weak.
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that's good
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it was fair
i thought the beginning was good but where is the rest.
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