To awaken from the guilt that dwells inside
Only causes tears to well in my eyes
Tears to be cried for all the pain I’ve inflicted
Tears to be cried every time I was a victim
Tears I refuse to let fall from these eyes
I hold on to these tears with so much pride
To awaken from the shame that looms over your head
Makes me want to cover up and crawl back into bed
Look back on my life; try to put things in perspective
No, go back to sleep, try not to be reflective
Stop beating myself up over what I cannot change
I need to forget about yesterday and live for today
To awaken by the voice of your inner child
Who’s suffered in silence all the while
Waiting to be loved and accepted at last
Yearning to put her suffering in the past
Makes me look at myself dead in the eyes
Looking at my reflection causes me to sigh
To awaken by emotions that refuse to be locked away
Gives me hope for the day when I only see sun rays
Touch my face to see if features have changed but it’s still me
When I feel differently but it’s only because I’m free
Realizing captivity prevented me from enjoying my surroundings
Become queen of my world, find my king and crown him
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Written October 14th, 2004
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You're not alone. This poem was wonderful.
The change in the second last stanza to third person was interesting and showed the reflection in what you were thinking.
The use of 1-2 1-2 rhyme was wonderful and the flow was particularly rhythmic throughout the whole piece.
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I'm glad I could touch you with my words. For every obstacle I encounter, I write about it as my way around it. I have been sleeping like a baby since I worte this. I can focus now. Hopefully you can draw some inspiration from this.
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Oh Sporadic this write on tonight of all nights is so touching to me. Alot has gone on of late that I cannot change. And the things and way people think? Ah this was so deep for me .. Truly a worthy read.. Thank You, TAKE CARE and Be Safe, Catressa
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Really good , yet another of your gr8 writes i like it alot -
this is really good i can relate to this keep up the great wrok <3 always Maria
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I hope you take this to heart when I say this: This was an amazing write! I have struggled with guilt over unintentional hurtful actions for years and I never found a way to deal with guilt. Your poem provided a solid answer: When I feel differently but it’s only because I’m free
Realizing captivity prevented me from enjoying my surroundings
Become queen of my world, find my king and crown him.
There is nothing cliche, or cheesy in this poem. It is solid all the way through. Great write.
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You're definately not alone in this.
This poem was penned very well. The stanzas are full and do not lack any syllable. It feels right to read it aloud. Plus the rhyming was well done and wasn't forced.
Excellent work here.
Peace 
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Awesome, Spectacular Write
You're definitely not alone in this. Somethings in life are not meant to be changed and beating yourself up won't cause circumstances to change either. When you "awakened" and realize that things are not in perspective only then can changes be made, your eyes have been opened and you see life for what it really is. Enjoy life for what it is, tomorrow is not promised to anyone and most importantly you must forgive yourself for the
things that happend in the past. Live for today and enjoy being the queen that you are and go find your king and crown him
Avril
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Very Good!
Yes. We all beat ourselves up over something. but you end up with the right perspective, hope. And what is this with so many of my favorites and hope today? lol Nicely done! -
This poem is probably one of my favourites i've read, it's so true and out of everybody elses poems, i think i could relate to this one the most, after wat happend in the recent past, i just never want to wake up, i feel dead inside, i beat myself up for it, great poem, i give it 5 stars
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wow this is really well written i love how you chosse your words it flows brilliantly. But i know how you feel i think we've all beat our selves up over somthing at one point in time. But keep on writting and i'll keep reading.
luv bunches,
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I know how you feel, as I beat myself up over several things incessantly. Although technically the use of the word "awaken" was in the wrong tense (you should've used awakened, since most of the poem seems to be written in preterite tense), I thought this to be quite good. And sad, too... it describes exactly how I am feeling at this moment. I don't know if you intended for the word awaken to be used in this way--if you did, ignore me
lol. I think that you rhyme beautifully, even as the poem brings tears to my eyes. You are a fantastic writer!
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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sorry i didnt mean to click twice I shall return the points
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I wonder at your choice of the word "awaken". It reads like you mean "awakened". As such, it is difficult to get past that one little point (in every stanza). Is there a reason why you are using the word that way?
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Such an honest look into your own self,which will always make you a better person.I enjoyed reading this alot.Thanks JIm
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aww. thats sad, but i LOVE it!!. this is GREAT. keep up the good work, Sporadic.
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This was an amazing write. It was intensely deep too. Wow. It flowed so naturally, from the heart. I liked how you used the last line. It seemed to take on authority. Very well done.
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So sad. So deep. I feel like that a lot. Good write. Hope you feel better than you did when you wrote this. Smile.
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Excellent
I think we all do this brow breating now and again, but does it matter? It makes such a wonderful sense of relief when the words are out and put behind us.... This was very well constructed in the "thought waves" its pretty much how I get to grips with things that bother me. Keep writing and letting all the doubts just disappear 
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awwww this is awsome! Gosh it was so easy to read too, this flows incredibly! I love your honesty in this write and so much truth is spoken here. Thanks for sharing your heart-beautiful. Love the ending too-there is victory over circumstnaces
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Such a sad write, don't be so hard on yourself. YOu seem to be a great person. I know, easier said than done. But, you penned this beautifully.
Jenn
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