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old cat sensei haiku

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old cat sensei
teaches fine art of pouncing
kittens wide-eyed












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MKL

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Written October 14th, 2004

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  • Sai Babas Lotus
    March 12, 2005
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    Beautiful ! Don't touch it!

    Ah! What a beautiful haiku indeed. I loved the imagery here and the reference to the old cat as "sensei" - marvellous work! I can visualise this without a problem. The underlying message also rings out loud that one must train the next generation to the best of their knowledge and skill, and, prepare them to face the world. A deep haiku written with a remarkable lightness!

    Thank you for sharing
    Charishma


  • myron silver member
    December 24, 2004
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    vivid

    aha, what a beautiful haiku; clear and vivid images, capturing a wonderful moment.

    i like the kitten background too...

    enjoyed the atmosphere you captured in this haiku...

  • Just Rachael
    December 9, 2004
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    Awww, this so made me miss my kitty!! It made me laugh in remembrance of all the cats I've had and kittens and just how cute they are when they play...even as adults...they never fully lose that kitten playfullness! A good example for us humans to live by!! Thanks for this!


  • Serenem
    October 16, 2004
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    Hello, Tina!

    Wow, it's so good to 'see' you here...

    Thank you so much for stopping by to read this. You are such a wonderful poet-- it's especially nice to recieve comments from you!

    Regards,

    Melinda


  • Ava Noire silver member
    October 15, 2004
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    Lovely reminder that cats and kittens are such fascinating and delightful little creatures

    I enjoyed reading!


  • Serenem
    October 15, 2004
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    Terry, I love your comment and reply haiku! Regards to your son for using his knowledge to give children the tools with which not only to protect themselves, but the inner strength to face life's challenges. He seems to follow his mother's path of enriching the lives of our youth!


    Thank you,

    Melinda


  • Terry-too silver member
    October 14, 2004
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    Because my older son has lived the sensei life for a quarter century or so, putting his stamp on jiu jitsu as a way of self-defense among kids who will never be bullied, this amused me in its resemblance.

    Wisdom of old cat
    knowing all exigencies
    passing to her young

    Terry

    Edited on Oct 14, 9:03 p.m. because ''.


  • Serenem
    October 14, 2004
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    Sheshe143, thank you so much for reading this... I'm very pleased that you liked it and I will be more than happy to check out yours right away!


    Regards to you,

    Melinda


  • Serenem
    October 14, 2004
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    *LOL*

    Thanks, Mari! It's really so funny to watch, especially when they do the little butt wiggle before the dash and pounce!
    Normally aloof, Artemis is an old softie when it comes to kittens; he's very gentle with them.

    I'm so glad you liked this.

    Love to you,

    Melinda
    Edited on Oct 15, 6:39 because 'typo'.

  • sheshe143
    October 14, 2004
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    a cute little haiku. i have a new one up as well.
    thanx much for sharing.
    much respect


  • Mari Goes gold member
    October 14, 2004
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    Is he a kung-fu master?
    This is so cute and amusing!
    I see that the old Artemis still has much to show!

    Lovely ku Mel!

    Kisses and love,
    Mari

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