A Light-Dancer,
she sways and twirls
in the moonlight.
Circles round and round
until she falls to the ground
breathless with her feverish
stepping, her toe-to-toe
whirling ballet. Her raven-colored
hair spreads out on the grass,
as the Moon sends fingers of gold
to caress her silken tresses.
She lies silent...contemplating
the movement, the meaning
in her dance with the brazen Moon.
It is her heart that speaks
rhythms, that sings love songs.
He waits in the shadows, in
the mist of her dreams. He worships
the way she swirls, the way
she steps. He exhales stars
to radiate even more light
for the Light-Dancer's dancing. She
rises from the ground...refreshed in
her resting, caught in her visions. He
holds her in dreams and speaks to her feet.
Shadow and light twirling together,
hand in hand with the brazen Moon.
Author notes
I truly believe this is one of my best poems. It was written after hearing a Native American poet, named Ron Welburn, reading his work at a local bookshop. I have always had this kinship with Native Americans; but this night started me on the path of writing Native American poems of spirituality and the re-telling of long forgotten tales. Of course, I have my own voice that gives me creative ways of expressing them. Hopefully, they become unique and can stand on their own.
Written July 17th, 2002
A contest entry
- Your best prewrite by glazecovered.
300 points, ended February 23, 2004, 274 entries
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Love it,it is very beautiful and descriptive.I could feel the vibrations as she danced,very spiritual~angelica~
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I too have native roots and find this very nice. I was so touched by it. Great work!
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I found it very spiritually-touching. I think it is a deepest longing, and very profound experience, to feel the need to dance to nature, whether it is the pounding percussion of a storm, or the soft sweet silence of a full moon. You portrayed this emotion beautifully, well done, and good luck in the contest! -
It was an okay poem. I really enjoyed reading it and I hope you enjoyed writing it. Keep up the good work. Good luck in the contest.
Continue shining,
Baby Star -
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Love it love it love it. Nothing more I can say. The imagery is beautifully, it left me breathless. It's absolutely amazing It is a work of genius!
Thank you sooo much for entering and good luck in the contest.
~Anastasia -
Wonderfully written, with just enough mystique to add spark and interest. Thanks for posting this one.
Best wishes,
Moses -
this poem is very beautifully written i really liked it seemed like i was there throughout the whole thing anyways keep writing and always share your poetryfriend
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he exhales stars and speaks to her feet. amazing second stanza.
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Worshipping should have one p :) -
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Enjoyed this read. This experience, really. It came to life most vividly when he exhaled stars. I can't claim such purity of heart in all my writings. I will keep working on it, however. -
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Beautiful!!!! and as always thanks for visiting! -
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will consider this one as well :) I visited earlier before I got your message about the chapbook. Was not a chore to read again as this is a remarkable poem -
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Special and so well written.
Sweetly romantic with a tender innocence.
RR -
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Wonderful repost ... It stays excellent ... -
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truly beautiful...uplifting read so full of passion & romance...really enjoyed :) -
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Beautiful! Excellent poem!
Sam -
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beautiful..... : )
~~ Connie ~~ -
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Your poems have a sense of spirituality in them...Subtly woven in the images you create! Something to definitely be enjoyed! :) -
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Such gorgeous imagery! Smooth sounding and quite the love poem. -
Thank you all so much for your generous comments on this poem. I'm so glad that it touched you in some way. Poetry is meant to be shared, felt. ***Ivy Rose
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*sigh* I am so mesmerized by the magical beauty of this poem...truly lovely...just amazing....*sigh* *twirls around on this page and falls down in a daze* :) -
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This is absolutetly beautiful, I love it! -
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And always the paradox ... what wondrous words ... -
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WOW, that's amazing. -
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I love how your titles have nature tied in with them! :) Thank you for the beautiful comment on my poetry! :) ***Sonya*** -
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twirling is one of my favorite words....
hand in hand ... this is lovely :)
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