One notch on my gun for every man I had to kill,
I stared every man down, my gun firing at will.
I hold the power close to my hip,
Custom made with a pearl handle grip.
Many have died because they didn't see me as a threat,
I'm sure that's a mistake, they would have liked to regret.
When I was sixteen years old, I was left on my own,
My survival skills are fine tuned, sharply honed.
I welcome the taste of grit inside my mouth,
The only thing I feel as I'm headed south.
My horse is the only one I dare trust,
I'm a young gun just doing what I must.
No sleep, I see all their dead eye stares,
My mind is wired, my soul layed thread bare.
Going through the motions of living, simply all pretend,
Dream of getting shot, putting my misery to an end.
I'll see what tomorrow brings, in the next one horse town,
Will my gun be fast enough, or will I get shot down?
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Written October 13th, 2004
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an interesting tale of the Ol' West...an entertaining read.
Rory -
Definite gunslinger feel to this as well. I liked the first two lines the best. Thanks for entering!
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Even though I have not read the Stephen King book mentioned - many seem to know and think you have done a great job writing this. Like the rhyming couplets you have chosen to write and the flow of these lines. Good job.
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A wild life indeed, the times of the wild west. We have it so easy in this day and age, comfort lives, television and stereo systems and cars. All they ahd were beans, a horse and their wit for most of the time, and quick hands or death.
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Excellent
Wow......quite the story! Your poem was flawless in every way, excellent rhyme and the flow was constant my horse didn't stumble once! Excellent write, Ken IBT -
this was a great and awesome write! the background and picture in all flow in to the poem well I enjoyed reading this write very good-written
Raneika
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Awsome!! That's really good!!
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Awesum write!
Lol no wonder u hav so many applauds!
Keep up the good work, thats amazing
-C
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Ride on girl, hope you dont meet up with the stranger with the big iron on his hip. Wide open spaces and a life of frenzied excitement is what I see through your western portrait. I thought of Jesse James and when he was shot, and also the movie young guns when I read over this write. Thanx for sharing and take care Queen.
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I love the picture in this! Your poem told a compelling story, and your style of writing is impressive, this poem completely captivated me, and is dark and haunting. Really, really good.
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Excellent
Queen, this poem was very interesting.
I loved it.
Keep penning.
*S* Cynthia -
Squee! Amazing, as usual. This one reminded me of "Young Guns", the movie with Emilo Estavez, about Billy the Kid. It was very well written. I loved the rhyme, and the images were absolutely perfect. Keep up the great work, sweetheart!
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Amazing
I agree with Chasing, lmao! Runnig after him with whiskey in my hands. Excellent,
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OOO... I like this! hehe. We used to go down to Oregon almost everyweekend to my Grandpa's home. He had a huge satellite disk, but all that he ever watched, or let us watch, were Western's. I always complained about having to watch them over and over, but now that we don't do that anymore, I really miss it... it is sad... anyway, thanks for bringing me back there for a while! I really like this piece, very short, sweet, and it delivers an awesome theme. I am going to have to read more of your poetry! ~~Kasia
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beautiful poem here my friend
now i can't get that bon jovi song out of my head "going out in a blaze of glory" yes from young guns 2. i'm living in the old west, and not much has changed, you can see it all happen in this dusty border town 
take care, now
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Wow, its amazing
This is amazing, the rhyme works and the story you portray the feelings and emotion brings in the audience perfectly to the adventure of this young gunslinger. Wonderfully done. CLAPS for you.
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I think you will win the draw, your faster then them other cowpokes!!
Awesome poem Queen
Love ya
Cindy -
holds hands up - don't shoot, i am just asking if you want double glazing on your horse. eek, runs off with your saddlebag full of smoke
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Oh cool, interesting topic to write about and you did well withit . Good job!!!
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wow - a female doing her own protecting - how seductive - nice poem (I promise to do as I'm told) - thank you
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We all enjoy the mystic of the gunslining cowboy. I like the part about grit in his mouth.. Nice visual.
I always enjoy reading your short very visualk poetic stories
Hugs
Den -
i havent read the poem yet lol i am a little drunk so i will come bac later. im just stat here with one eye open
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10/10
this is dark write you have done here queen. It was still good rather I don't like dark writes but I do have to say this one I did (of how you wrote it) nice work again queen!
sadie
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Not as refined as I would have hoped, but I loved the free and eager spirit that drove this poem. It's always amazing to write about something as wild and free as a lone cowboy. Perhaps if you added a bit more description, such as a comparison between him (or his soul/spirit) and the swiftly blowing dusty wind...I dunno. But it was excellent, keep it up!
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I loved this poem, only because I like westerns, and your poetry is wonderful. Reminds me of that old show my parents and their friends talk about, with Emilio Estavez...I don't know what it is, but they always talk about it. This kind of made me feel as though I was really there and that's neat. Awesome write!
~*KP*~
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Not bad at all! It kinda reminds me of The Dark Tower series by Stephen King; makes me think of Roland, the Gunslinger; even though I know you were writing a Western poem. I say, keep up the good writing!
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I loved the way this all flows together! Just like watching an old western movie with the draws! It's so kool how you thought of it! I love you poems and I've added you to my favorites...I don't know if you knew that of not! Great job!!
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GREAT
WOOO! spaghetti western taken away from the big screen... i love the bad ass quality it's as if travis bickle and clint eastwood are goin' at it... good read i look forward to more
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it reminds me of the movie,young guns.you are so good at choosing the obscure subjects and bringing them into the light of being a very interesting and enjoyable write.i am just amazed now as when i first read you.thank you for being so great.
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Very good poem, the words you used and the way they was placed made me have a very good visualization(?) of the whole scene.I like :-)
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This is wicked cool..I loved it. Its amazing how you could pick a topic that I myslef see boring, and make it soo much deeper then its superficial meaning. Great work.-Sher
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AWESOME
Wow! This is really cool! I am reading the Dark Tower series by Stephen King right now and this reminds me of the Gunslinger.He is the main character.(It is an awesome series; you should red it!) I really enjoyed reading this! 
Dark-Princess
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