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Fences

Shamia climbed a fence one day
It led her astray
She got lost
She kept her fingers crossed
Hoping that she would find her way
and at last Hooray!

She doesnt climb fences anymore
she should of thought of that before






Why not use the Alley?

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Written October 13th, 2004

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  • simple illusion
    October 21, 2004
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    i liked that....i thought the flow was very well done but i didnt like the horray! part....it seemed a little out of place but good job besides that


  • Reece Magic
    October 13, 2004
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    Okay

    Okay, I didn't understand "she would find her way, then finally, hooray" but the poem flowed good. It seemed like you were cheering that she didn't find her way or something. But the flow was good and the poem was good, kept alive by the final two lines which is the strongest asset of any poem.