*Though I may not see them*
*Even when I stare*
*They still tingle all my senses*
*To keep me so aware*
*A reminder that they're close*
*Of this I now can share*
*When I feel upon my neck*
*As they hover, so beware*
*For this breath of Angels*
*Lets me know when they are there*
*Giving me protection*
*Thus remind me that they care*
Author notes
Sometimes you just have this feeling! I hope you enjoy.
Bill
Written October 12th, 2004
A contest entry
- Inspiration please! anything goes! by woman onamision.
650 points, ended February 25, 2006, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hi Wendy:
All I can say is that I hope you are right. Sometimes, more than others, do I need one with their hand on my shoulder to steer me through the day. I am pleased you enjoyed this poem and thank you for your kind words. Bill -
Beautifully written!
what a beautiful poem, Bill! i am sure Angel's look over you, my friend. -
Hi Sam:
This was as a result of your one hour contest that I missed. Thanks for your kind and wonderful words. I was hoping you would like it. Take care. Bill -
Hi Genelle:
The beware was more of "you never know when to expect it" type of beware than fear. With the balance of the poem, I thought I had conveyed that you have nothing to fear. Thanks for your comment as I always appreciate your insight. Bill -
Beautiful imagery. Breath of the Angels...love the feeling that sends to me. This is really a wonderful piece. WEll done...
Sam
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Nicely expressed Bill!
That feeling of 'presence' is unmistakable, and you've conveyed it well.
The only thing I wasn't sure about was your placement of "beware", as it suggests being afraid of them in some way.
I wondered if swapping 'there' with 'beware' would clarify that. i.e.
As they hover, right there
This breath of the Angels
Lets me know to beware
And give me protection
Thus remind me they care
Just an idea
~ G
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Hi John:
I would be interested in that story. I am pleased that you enjoyed this write. Sam primed that story with her contest, I was just too late to enter, so I posted it. More often than not, I enjoy posting and having a variety to read than the contests. Thank you again for your wonderful comments. Bill -
Bill, this reminds me of something that happened to me a long time ago. It’s a long story that I may just post here on AP, to share it with others. Let’s just say it was a time when I though for sure I had been abandoned by God. Then He hit me with a 2X4, like He loves to do from time to time. Awesome way of putting your feelings down in rhyme.
~ John
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Hi Brownfox:
Thank you for taking your time to read and comment on this poem. Is your poem posted on site? If so, what is the name of it? I would like to check it out. Thanks again. Bill -
Hi Susan:
Thank you for your story. There is a time and place for everything and to be witness to it is special. I will check out your nature work. Thanks for the comments and the heads up. Bill -
Hi Bill:
You also probably have one under each arm to keep you proped up all the time, as your mind is always working. I do so appreciate it when you comment. Thank you very much and yours always keep you in good sted. Bill -
Hi Denise:
One thing I think you will get from most of my writes it that I try to be uplifting. In this one too, I try to view the positives as there are far more people in this world pushing out the negative. Thank you again for your wonderful comments. Bill -
Hi Nyx Anath:
I am glad you found your Angel. Some people never do, so consider yourself one of the fortunate ones. Thank you for taking your time to read and comment on this poem. I do appreciate it. Bill -
Hi Susan:
Well, I am glad you came back to it and commented. Sam gave me the inspiration, but I missed her contest. Thank you for your lovely comments. I always appreciate your words of wisdom. Bill -
Oh My goodness... I thought I commented on this when I read it yesterday!
Angels do exist and they are a blessing. standing by us when we need them most.
this is lovely, I like this short little verse and will be bookmarking it...
As I said before.. Good to have you back!
Susan -
heh, i've found an angel, and his voice before i sleep reminds me he cares.
nicely written.
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I get those feelings too. I never thought of it as angels though. I always pictured spirits in anger who haven't yet finished with this world and wish to cause me harm. A little demented huh? I think it's because I've seen too many scary movies.
You did quite well with the rhyme scheme and the overall piece flowed without flaw.
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BillExcellently worded and rhymed.My angels in sous mysterious
manner get into my bratn if and when I need their tender loving care. -
Hi Pierre:
Thank you so very much for your thoughts and comments. I really appreciate the thought you put into your comments. Great to feel you are not alone, especially in times of need. Thanks again. Bill -
excellent~
When I had German Measles and Double Pneumonia
I told my mom I saw 3 angels hovering over my bed
I know for a fact they exsit, and indeed are my guardians
Hope all has been okay with you
I got up a new nature one
Hope you drop by for the read
Love n hugs
Susan~~~
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I like this poem. it reminds me of one i've written. nice
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Excellent!
I have felt this too. Though beliefes are different the welcome feelings are the same.
Well spoken here!
It is always a good feeling of having that guardian around us especially in times of need.
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