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Last Will

This, my friends and loved ones, is my last will and testament.
For the value of my life is minimal, not worth an estimate.
The pain inside too great, death the only alternative.
The sorrow of those left behind, no longer relative.
It's like a two-edged sword pierced my heart.
The pain of love turned bad tearing me apart.
Is this God's cruel joke or revenge for the way I live my life?
If so, fuck you God I have no regret for my life, be it end by
gun or knife.
I lived and loved to the best of my ability, the best I humanly could.
But why should you care, you sit up high and tell us to do what we
should.
Having no real compassion for mankind or even one woman.
My life over, my heart broken, I tried to do all I can.
But alas it wasn't enough, it just wasn't fucking good enough for you.
Well all powerful God of nothing, I've decided death is what I should
do.
My miserable excuse for a life will be over soon, I have no fear.
For this is the last of years of prayer that you probably didn't even
hear.
Now I slit my wrists and let the crimson blood spill.
And with this last will complete may i draw my last breath and
embrace the time when my body is eternally still.

Author notes

not gonna kill myself just writing. and yes i know it sux bbut oh well i wanted to post something
Written October 11th, 2004

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  • lithium
    October 17, 2004
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    dayum girl!...i didn't know that you could rhyme...jamie's got rhymes now, okay! ...hehe i liked this alot, and im glad that u aren't gonna kill urself
    much love and respect
    ~~lithium~~


  • FallingDeep
    October 13, 2004
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    i loved it jamie. Totally beautiful. The 'crimson blood' part is a bit cliche, but the rest of the piece almost made me cry, cause your life surely is worth more than you think. Talk to me later, ok?

    Neurotically yours (*squeak!!*)

    Chels


  • enymatik90-09
    October 11, 2004
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    yeah....I used ta have certain thoughts of it , ya know whu' i meens? eh? well....I am becomin' ta be ok an' u will, to!
    anyways
    I thought this was pretty rockin'!