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the soft sound of snow
falling on stones
between us
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MKL
Author notes
I hope that this is a good example of when an 'ing word' is used effectively in haiku.
Thank you,
Melinda
Written October 11th, 2004
A contest entry
- ~ haiku ~ 13 hour contest ((CLOSED)) by FifthDove.
300 points, ended October 11, 2004, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Sheshe, Thank you for all your very kind comments on my haiku!
Regards,
Melinda -
totally mesmorizing......
truly------truly beautiful.
you've made your mark
thanx so muhc for sharing -
Cindy, thank you for the honorable mention! This was a wonderful contest!
Regards,
Melinda -
Mari,
I live in a warmer climate... our winters are usually pretty mild...
Thank you, as always, dear,
Melinda -
Thank you so much, touch!
Regards,
Melinda -
I really enjoy the snow, but I don't like the cold. I like snow in sunny days
Very nice haiku Melinda!
Good luck in everything you do!
Kisses and love,
Mari
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This makes me look for to the holidays and all the great scenery that lies ahea of us yet. Great job! ood luck in the contest.
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Thank you, Rebeka, for noticing the intended contrast! I appreciate your comments very much...
Regards,
Melinda -
Poetryality, more often than not, you leave me with a smile on my face! Thank you for your comments and good wishes!
Regards,
Melinda -
i like how you put soft snow in the same place as the cold hard stones, and gave them more than silence...very nice, i enjoyed this -
I love haikus and this one makes me love them more. I love ths beauty of snow but hate the fact that it's cold. If it could snow and be 70 degrees it woud be a perfect world.
This is soft, subtle and very soothing. Good luck to you in the contest! 
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Cindy, thank you for your comments. I always so enjoy participating in your contests-- you seem to inspire the best poems...
Regards,
Melinda -
Thank you, pozo, for your comments; I appreciate them very much!
Regards,
Melinda -
Winter is just amazing to me. I love the freshness of the snow but the mess it leaves when melting is depressing. Silent snow at night is the most awesome of all. Very good haiku. I enjoyed the voyage it took me on. Thank you for the entry and good luck
Cindy -
This is a well written poem about snow and winter, I liked it a lot A great haiku, perfectly written Thanks for commenting on mine and keep writing, you're a good writer
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I'm so pleased that you like this, Anasuya! Thank you!
Melinda -
Haikus make me giddy happy. I just love them, and this is no exception. I think it kind of leaves the reader hanging, wanting more, but that's only in a GOOD way. Snow is very meaningful to me (I dream of snow ALL the time), so this kind of hits a chord for some reason. Beautiful write.
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