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Waiting For Lunch (haiku)

sits upon lily pad

awaits tasty lunchtime treat

green venus fly trap

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Written October 11th, 2004

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  • slick99
    August 28
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    boy, this is a great haiku!!! i like haikus and this is a really good one!!! have a nice day, -slick99

  • Sandygram silver member
    October 3, 2007
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    Thank you Allen. I appreciate you stopping by and reading and commenting. You take care, Sandy

  • Sandygram silver member
    December 21, 2004
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    Thank you for the lovely comment. I always enjoy hearing from you. Take care, Sandy

  • Forms of Me
    December 21, 2004
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    This is a very well written Haiku...I like to read them...I can not do well at writing them however.

    You have done marvelous with this one..as I know you seem to always do.

    Keep up the good writing

  • Sandygram silver member
    October 11, 2004
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    Thank you for the encouraging words. This was my first attempt at haiku. I had fun, that's what counts. I only started writting poetry in Jume. I was counting syllables for an hour. Oh Well. . Take care and thank you again. Take care, Sandy
    Edited on Oct 11, 12:53 because ''.

  • Touchof1der Moderators member
    October 11, 2004
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    This painted a somewhat amusing picture in my head. I like this. You seem comfortable writing haiku. I am not. Good luck in the contest.

  • Sandygram silver member
    October 11, 2004
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    Thanks pozo, I'm not getting much done at home today. I guess it's my goof off day. Did you get the smiley chain letter yet on your author's page. I got one. If you didn't I'll send it to you. Take care, Sandy

  • Sandygram silver member
    October 11, 2004
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    Hey, better yet, how about some yummy frog legs. Rebeka says she'll bring the barbecue sause. Don't worry, you can use your frog suit on Halloween. Thanks for the comment. Take care. Sandy
  • pozo
    October 11, 2004
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    I liked the last line best of all, very witty and clever A great write describing the frog, I love your poetry Thanks for commenting on my poem
    God bless,
    Pozo

  • rebeka
    October 11, 2004
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    little frog planning on a nice lunch, why do you have the bar b que sauce ready....haha, i like this one, even the nice froggy green colour makes me think of a little pond i know of, excellent write

  • Ladybug
    October 11, 2004
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    sure makes me understand the natural food chain in our nature land, LOL

  • October 11, 2004
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    hehehe aye yes you know me lol if it mentions food i am a fan of it where did i put my frog suit, it was here a minute ago, i would like flies with my burger

  • Sandygram silver member
    October 11, 2004
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    Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. Great contest. Take care, Sandy

  • Sandygram silver member
    October 11, 2004
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    Thanks Melinda, I appreciate your comment. This was my first attempt at a haiku. She only wanted 5, 7, 5 , sllables. I hope this was right. At least I gave it a shot. Take care jersey girl, Sandy
    Edited on Oct 11, 10:03 because ''.

  • Dove Moderators member
    October 11, 2004
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    I can just see this little frog "eyeing" lunch from his lilypad..lol Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
    Cindy

  • Serenem
    October 11, 2004
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    Nicely done!

    This is such a cute haiku-- love the comparison of the frog to a venus flytrap-- it made me chuckle, Sandy!
    Nicely done!

    Regards to you, dear lady,

    Melinda
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