Burning me inside
Is a flame I try to hide
No matter how hard I try
It keeps getting higher
Water filled eyes
Pain filled heart
Thoughts filled brain
Ask for a relaxing day
Await the person who lit this fire
Knowing he's the only one desired
I am now ashamed,
I can't kill the flame.
Its a dying candle
To light his way
...back to my heart...
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I hate how I burn for you inside without letting you know how I truly feel about you. I am sorry I have let these feeling grow stronger instead of killing them. Hoping that you will come back to me someday.
Written October 10th, 2004
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Good poem. I can relate...but oh can't we all. lol.
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i really like the last stanza and the the poem becomes so much more powerful after reading the comment, its plain heartfelt emotion with the one clear metaphor of the fire (its a classic and a good one) that puts the feeling across. its hard when you have to put out the flame, but its nice to have it burning coz its a scary thought to think that one day it may be gone forever. best of luck =)
glitch -
I can identify with the emotion. I think we all can. A great poem is universal, and this is a great poem. Thanks and write on!
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It almost becomes habit doesn't it? Letting your insides grow.
I guess all I can suggest is killing a habit with another habit.
Over and out. (and yes I believe I did read this a loooong time ago) -
Mother this was absolutly wonderful in such a sad way
I think my views on this whole love thing have changed...Heart-break and conflict and struggle is terrible, You really showed your emotions within this poem, lovely. Just know I'm always here to listen if you need me, great job again on this 
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...um...light...
I like this, it's...honest, simple.
It doesn't hide beyond the poetic vague.
We'll see what happens, won't we?
L8RZ!!!
*hugs her*
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I love this poem i mean its expresses your feeling so well and i think we have all been where you have been i mean it shows how you feel towards the person and whats deep in your heart i love this part of the poem I am now ashamed,
I can't kill the flame.
Its a dying candle
To lite his way
...back to my heart...
Because i noe how you feel i feel the exact same way with my ex bf...i dont noe if this is about and ex love or friend or anything else but its beautifully written and is awesome cause you can take it in so many ways...your pain is beautifully expresses awesome write! -
beautiful
i can totally relate to your comment left after your poem. I hate how I cant move on but it's sumthing that I didnt choose to do, love chose it for me. I love this.. and the only thing i can tell you is.. dont give up, especially if you can feel it in your heart, dont ever give up..
<3kay -
AWESOME!
this is a short yet straight-to-the-point and a beautifully written poem! very wonderful! i love it! -
the name just seems random!
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i can totally relate i still pray to have someone ive wanted for four years, i can't have him and i know it. such descriptive words and a very nice flow, its my feelings to a T. my advice to you would be to tell him exactly how you feel but mild it down so you doin't scare him, but only tell him if know one else gets hurt because i made the mistake of not making sure the persons girl friend didn't find out and at that time she happened to be one of my close firends who i promised i didn't have these feelings. its a long story but basically im not friends with her because she cant trust me n he's no longer my best friend because hes not aloud to talk to me freely. just be careful who you tell and who you hurt. i particularly like your line 'ask for a relaxing day' because it just puts with such power the torture your in. i also like the last stanza because it shows you are still looking on the good side of it and maybe some where in your heart you don't want the flames to go and your still praying he will come back. a great insight, well done and keep it up ~tazmin~
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great
Keep the fire burning. If you kill these feelings, it's like you're giving up on love. Don't give up! This is a great poem, keep up the wonderful work. Love ya See ya Bye
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Great job on this poem! It's not too lengthy and gets right to the point..I can see how you're feeling and I especially liked where you said
"Await the person who lit this fire
Knowing he's the only one desired"
Keep up the good work
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Sometimes it is a good thing to not kill those feelings. Trust me. I know. Keep the fire burning bright and maybe you might just be surprised at a knocking on your door by the man that you long for.
This is a great one sis. You totally rock!
~ John aka - bro
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As for the poem, it is elegant and simple as well as touching - a delema as to how to react -such life situations - and portrayed in an almost tortured image - superb write - I love your author comments - hating how you feel as it is the source of your pain -also implied that you are not in a situation to let that person know what you think - so much said in these words -
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