It was at late night, that this most unholy experience happened,
I found myself walking throw the streets all alone from my work at the Pizza Pizza.
I admit it; I was scared, with nobody in sight,
Well, expect for the man lurking in the shadows.
The streets were wet from the rain earlier that day.
I tried to keep my distance,
But he was catching up,
I tried to loose him,
But every corner I turned,
He just stood across from me,
Standing tall,
Standing strong.
I ran
I ran
I ran
Throw the streets,
Then throw the woods,
I got reminded of all those scary movies
Where those people try to run away from some ridiculously slow killer, they would fall down, then a second later the
Monster would show up and rip them to peaces.
There flesh and blood would dance in the air
For a slight moment,
Then fall right on the person’s murderous face.
I had to get my mind clear,
With all these images of death in my head, I know I’d be sure to wet my pants. My pants were new also,
Got them from my grand mother,
But just then, I tripped over a branch of a tall creepy tree,
I think it did it on purpose.
The owls where hooting, the wolves were howling,
I knew
I should have just called my parents to pick me up from work.
Now with this freak of the night catching up to me,
I had to get up and run to somewhere of safety.
Just then I felt the person’s cold hands on my shoulder,
I turned around,
I turned around,
I turned around
To face my doom
it was dark,
But I could make out his tall and scary figure
Standing
There in the shadows,
He was holding a strange tall object, and was approaching it
Towards me,
I was so scared,
I closed my eyes.
...
...
...
...
...
But then I heard a familiar voice
“You forgot your umbrella at work buddy”
I opened my eyes,
HAH
It was just my friend and co-worker SATAN
From down under.
Such a nice man,
Came all this was to give me my umbrella that
I so irresponsibly forgot at the pizza pizza,
how clumsy of me.
I got back home,
watched a scary movie,
then went to sleep
Author notes
Written October 10th, 2004
A contest entry
- Scare us with a twist... (New Member Contest- October) by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended November 2, 2004, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i will correct my spelling when i feel like it buddy, u'r not my real mom. oh jeez, y are we fighting?
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This was really funny. It had a good dramatic feel to it from beginning to end, well until the end of course.
Since the spelling corrections were already pointed out, I will not harp on them. OK, just a little, you really should make those corrections. Stuff like that could seriously take away from a piece like this. Keep penning.
~ John
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haha thats really awesome! i had the whole thing invisioned in my head lol. it was great.
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This was a good story, while reading, it draws the reader in wanting to know what is going to happen next however the ending was not a surprise as we knew it would have to have a twist and this is the most common thing for someone to be trying to help not stalk lol
anyways still a good job. thanks for entering and good luck! 
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Very moody piece and fuzzy images you drew here. Almost like the movies of Hitchcock-esques. Playing on the fears of the readers. Thank you for entering and welcome to AP.
~Willow~ -
LOL
I like this a lot, was right there too
There are a few spelling errors however thats easily corrected
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
Susan~~~ -
I liked this one alot. I had me laughing.
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Funny
wow great poem really built up tension the spelling mistakes r ok i make them all the time :-( Great write funny ending satan a good guy thats be the day hell freazes over
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My heart was racing along with yours whilst you were dodging shadows. A great story line - if I may say:
throw - through
peaces - Pieces
There - their
I wasn't sure about the 'wet pants' until I re-read and although it detracted from the build-up for me it was rather funny.
A brilliant finish, thank you for your entry to our contest and good luck
Welcome to AP
~Von~ -
thnx budd, good luck in the future on this site
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Thanks for commenting on one of my poems. I think that you've got some good stuff. I'm pretty new here too! It's true that you've madae a few spelling mistakes but that almost adds to the effect created - the scary element with the ridiculous. I thought it was a great laugh! Well done!
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Thank you talented poet, wish me luck on this contest ...yeah, so, windy today eh?
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You worked the poem up to look like it'd be pretty darn freaky then out of nowhere "With all these images of death in my head, I know I’d be sure to wet my pants. My pants were new also,
Got them from my grand mother" lol it made me laugh..which is a good thing...and the ending was a good example of how the dark can play tricks on our minds...great job with this one. -
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thnx, and my name is babak, i know i can't spell, i try my best thou, i am new here, i hope i will make a big impact -
very good
Happy to Baba - I think it's very good, despite all the spelling mistakes, but I'm being a bit pedantic now !
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