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macrocosm
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microcosm
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Author notes
Connected to preceding ku, 'Mystic' allpoetry.com/poem/845368
Written October 10th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- #4-contest by FifthDove.
300 points, ended October 12, 2004, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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wow
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Hey! This is brilliant! It says a lot, love it! nicely done! You non-conformist, you! Hehe! Love lulu xxx
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no, don has the right of it. there are some people on this site that tend to want to drive the 5-7-5 rule home with a hammer... lol. not necessary especially when most of the old haigin never held to the rules anyway. the spirit of haiku is what we seek.
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Thank you!
If you are referring to haikumonk as the haijin, I am quite in tune and agreement with his accurate understanding of traditional Japanese haiku (as opposed to English misunderstandings). This is a contemporary one anyway. 
~G
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nice minimalism. I hope you're not being confronted by the 'traditional' haigin of the site with their insistance upon rules that very few ancient haigin followed. you've captured the spirit of haiku very well here and that's what counts with haiku.
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Wonderful! I cannot say much...
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Thank you for your kind comments, Ferenc!
I don't think I've heard of the film you mentioned, but I'll be
sure to look for it.
~ G
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Cool!
Should be printed on T-shirts and distributed for free to all school-going kids that still have an open mind...
Did you ever see the film "Mirror" by Andrei Tarkovski by any chance? Reading your Mystic work, I am sure you would appreciate it...
Cheers! -
the universe is a single dewdrop of love
In the wholeness’ of us
reflections guide us in the light
as strands of the whole unite in arms of life
This is the wisdom of old in three lines
That inscribed the eternal roads of paradise!
Absolutely a shimmering bead and joy to read!
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Hi Gennelle,
An absolute jewel of a poem! Everything is right there, condences, concentrated!
I wish I had time to write more but am being whisked away by my #1 son for a big family dinner that I didn't even have to cook!! (Thanksgiving in Canada)
Terry -
How true.
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How huge and how small can be all the things that matter in life... Again, a wonderful thought!
K&L,
Mari
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Oh my! Bless you for your wonderful comments and profound insights, Myra!
I appreciate it so very much! 
~ Gennelle
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Superb
Dearest Gennelle
Ah ... How intensely reflective - in both literally and figurative way ... I see a single droplet, hanging on a leaf, mirroring the sky above ... Or the eye, mirroring all the colours of the rainbow and that of creation ...
And then - this haiku as you meant it: the inner eye, the spirit, being in total coherence with creation and Creator - the connectivity between the collectivity of souls in the spiritual realm ...
Then, the importance of alliteration - poetic devices are of cardinal value in such a converged write. Interesting the echo of the in in mind - truly serendipity here! and then, also a form of rhyme or alliteration, this echo.
Well - I can go on and on and on ... Background and font, for instance, with its royal blue and gold (my favourite colours) and the font colour and the outlay of the poem - added to the regal and divine content!
You've achieved such refinement in this write, Poetess. I am awe struck. And, I am glad you've decided not to change it - it cannot be altered.
Myra -
I do appreciate the suggestion, but once I've distilled something into a haiku-type image that's how it stays. To try to expand it would be forced and disrespectful to my muse, so to speak. If that makes sense.
~ G
Edited on Oct 10, 10:52 because 'typo'. -
This is a chance to make more description, and expand to 12 lines! There is plenty of meat here for a longer poem.
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Thank you, Margaret! I just got a kind reminder from Serenem that I missed an important detail in the rules for the contest I just put these in - minimum of 12 lines. Oh, well.
Yeah, I have had dreams like these - in meditation too.
~ G
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Faultless
This is a beautiful presentation of a gigantic thought.
Knowing that there is no room for elaboration in a haiku, still I wish for more than a bald statement. My opinion is that it works both ways, and distorted thinking can really affect the universe. The task of the mystic then is to make the downward reflection perfect, and minimise the upward reflection.
This is what you dream at night? Wow.
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