These wings have broken and I fly no more
My spirit has died, it can no longer soar
These tears don't flow, you cannot see
All of the pain that lies within me
My Dragon Heart continues to bleed
And on that blood, the darkness does feed
There's a river flowing of crimson red
The darkness can't kill me, I'm already dead
My lovely black scales have lost their shine
Nothing can heal this soul of mine
I have no strength to move at all
This Dragon of Darkness no longer stands tall
She's slowly dying, crying inside
But all of her sorrow, she continues to hide
A veil of black, an illusion you see
She laughs, she smiles, but is she happy?
It's all a game to just go along
Just an act, but she wishes to be strong
She envies those who withstand more
She hates herself for being easily torn
So, she lies here and gives up on life
She continues to live that of a lie
No one understands, no one can help
It's too late, she can't even help herself
The Shadow Dragon's heart bleeds its last drop
The one named Rose feels her heart stop
She lies there motionless, shrouded, lonely
This hollow Shadow Dragon is my identity
Author notes
Written October 7th, 2004
A contest entry
- Come to My World by Sapphire Rose.
350 points, ended March 25, 2005, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dragons! by Fallen-Knight.
450 points, ended October 7, 2007, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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lovely but sad
beautiful i truly feel your poem good luck with the contest -
This was one of my most favorite poems back when I wrote it. I'n glad you liked it.
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Dragons. ♥ I adore them muchly. This poem was beautiful Rose, it reminds me of the poem I wrote about the Angel of Darkness and the Angel of Light. I saw this Shadow Dragon as Darkness' other, more emotional side, in a weird way. =S
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I really love this poem...and yes, the rhyme, I guess, was a little forced in a few of the stanzas. I had a lot of trouble with the one mentioned, is she really happy. As for Rose, you can call her my persona. She is a lot like me in a lot of ways.
I don't rhyme a lot of poetry most of the time, but the fact is that I can't seem to help it in some poems and then I end up rhyming anyway whether it's bad or good. I wrote some not so bad rhyming poems today that are a lot to do with the one I entered in your contest. When I get them posted, I hope you'll read them too. Thank you for commenting and I swear, one of these days I will read your story! -
Great
Wow...You have a wonderful talent here...the rhyming didn't follow through in every line like it seemed you were planning, but it still hits me as rather good. I like the affiliation towards Rose, your dragon-character person-thingy. You know, I don't know quite what to call that dragoness...
Anyway, it seemed almost as if you were forcing the rhyme here or there and, in some cases, forgetting it entirely because it just didn't seem to fit for you. My advice on that: First, don't force rhyme. Second, don't bother rhyming unless you really really really want to....or if your like me, you can't help it most of the time.
Oky, that's all I really got to say now. I hope to hear from you tonight. I'll be about and we can have a huge posting section again! I've missed that since I was gone!
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Thank you for your kind words. I really love this poem. Thank you for the congrats and taking the time out to read and comment.
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*cries * that was amazing. I love dragons, but I love sad poems with a load of imagery in them more. You did an outstanding job of making an image of that poor dragon in my mind and that on it's own is an achievement. The vivid imagery and the amount of emotion in this piece of writing is simply outstanding.
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I love that movie a lot and I did cry when I saw the ending. Rose is actually my nickname, lol. I didn't know there was a second movie of Dragon Heart though. I'm glad you liked this piece.
If you just simply adore Dragons that much, might I interest you in a story or two that I have been working on? Draconic Soulmates has 40-41 chapters posted and Draconic Salvation has 4 chapters posted, both stories have a prologue to boot and are in collections, so they would be easy to find.
I hope, if you ever have the time, that you might look at one of them. I recommend Draconic Soulmates, however, because it has more chapters posted and also because I am currently on writer's block and lack time to finish the stories, let alone work on them.
Thank you for your time and expecially for the kind words.
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I love dragons to no end, though I simply cannot write about them worth my life and someone else's attached. I'm still attempting to though.
This piece almost made me cry since it reminded me of one of my favorite movies entitled "Dragonheart." (The second one was terrible, don't watch that one.) They had to make Draco die because he was my favorite character... -sniffles- Ahem, anyway, the pictures you created for my mind are fantastic! The name Rose is related to me since it happens to be in the middle of all my mumble jumble. Nicely done.
Thankies muchly for entering and I hope the sweetest of dreams always find you! ~D~ -
Nice poem; great imagery. Isn't crimson already red?
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Absolutely beautiful write...i cnat believe i entered this contest with my poem next to yours...yours is absolutely beautiful..fullof emotion and beauty...the images you paint are equisite....keep up the amazing work!
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This is syko and i loved your poem it wa full of feeling keep up the good work.. and umm SMILE.. put a fron tif you must after fronting for so long you see it becomes reality.. Good luck!
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To go along with terrific imagery, this flows well- except at one point- "She laughs, she smiles, but is she really happy?"
IMHO- the really is not needed and it makes the flow stumble a bit. Just a suggestion. Great entry- Good luck
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Oh I loved the imaginary. Very nice work! Thank you for entering
Jenn
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Waaaah! *cries* This was a wonderful poem, I have to say, as much as I hate to read about a dragon dying. Just one thing, you switched perspective halfway through, from I to she. Was that intentional? It kinda threw me a bit.
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Beautifully written!! It is a poem that really made me smile and want to read over and over again.. total emotion and magnificents felt ~ Best of luck in the contest
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wow. this was extremly good. i loved the flow and the rhyme! so nicley written. very lovely indeed. Great write!
Good luck in the contest!
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Yaaaaay Dragon poems. I love it. Love Background. Yaaay Dragons. <3 Mucho luvo. <3 !!!
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This....hits home in more ways than one. Your words are so full of powerful emotions and the meaning....is indepth as if you were speaking words of my walks...Nicely done and well written. Keep penning
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Thanks for the offer and the comment. I really appreciate it. ^^
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EXCELLENT!!!
wow,have you ever played legend of dragoon?this reminds me of just what happened in the story
other then that ,this is a great poem.well written flow.
got to say i love it !
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O My god that was so good. I can't even put into words how deep that was. It mad me so sad. I hope things get better. If you need to talk e-mail me @ holesfan@ev1.net
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