An eternal carbon void.
Welcome to Earth.
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Sorry I haven't been around much lately, I've been busy with work and stuff.
Written October 9th, 2004
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Thanks, and your comment made perfect sense. I'm glad this 'poem' gave somebody something. It's a bit of a lazy piece really, just lounges around all day. Thanks again,
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lol love the sarcasm.
What really invited me to read this poem was the title. The word vast is vast in meaning. i always invision myself trancending into the sky and flying over the earth. Skimming the surface, yet not down in the choas as your other comment refered to. I wrote a poem once about this expirence abd the vastness of it all. Your poem reminded me of that. I hope I made some sense. -
Meh. Maybe you don't grasp the content.
Edited on Oct 09, 4:57 p.m. because ''. -
Confusion / Chaos / Critical Mass / ?
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Lol, and I'm feeling lucky... Lol. You're very welcome. Caz. Xx
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Thanks Caz, I really appreciate it. I'll try and do that next time I write... maybe be one about you, if you're lucky
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Oh, you've been busy with work? Write another about me is my advice.
Lol, nah, not really. This is good but I think it's about time I gave you some constructive criticism, so, here we go: you are always so blunt, step out of the poem and read it as a detached observer and realise that this poem is not personal to you. Elaborate on your imagery, by all means, but please don't spell out your message. I know that you are excellent at describing things and using metaphors. Chris, use your imagery and language skills to your advantage, it will make your poetry better. Carry your story-telling skills into your poems. Caz. Xx
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Could I get a proper comment please?
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bleak
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That was a quick reply. Thanks.
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Brief but good.
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