I’ve limply laid in everglades; got grimly glum in gorges;
Among rude rills I’ve sadly stilled - and fairly feebly forded.
On isthmus idyll isn’t I, on lowlands have I languished,
I’ve melancholia caught in cols and over passes anguished.
Yet on the pampas I was pert and flourished in fjords,
I glowed in grassed and shaded glens all merry o’er their sward.
Misty mounts I mocked in mirth, reviling in their ranges,
And guilelessly giggled on great grades, so grateful for the changes.
But do not fear my cartographers - geographers save your frowns,
For ‘tis but an overly oddish ode, upon life’s ups and downs…
Author notes
Written October 8th, 2004
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Very witty
It seems that maps cannot explain
the feelings found in each terrain;
you know the smiles and surly frowns
exacted by life`s ups and downs.
I enjoyed this very much, not only the clever rhymes and nice rhythm, but the alliteration and the exceptional revelation at the end. Well done!
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Oh verbose vagabond, verily I say to thee
I doubt you languished long...
For even in the lowlands- you sing a happy song.
- your words never fail to bring a smile to a certain girl, about my height.
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you are like your page says, truly a word-smith. Excellent.
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Wryly wrought and free of topographical errors.
This reminds me a bit of an advertisement I saw in a travel magazine touting the wonders of Georgia's Gorgeous Gorges, Marvelous Mounds and Beautiful Buttes...
Come to think of it, that wasn't a travel magazine at all...
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lol then what was it?
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hmmmm I bet you could do wonders in Wales...lurch around in the leeks perhaps...or dally in the daffs...or maybe mingle in a mountain hehe...ok so I haven't got your flair for lucious words....bravo once again sir!...the whole thing was delicious...leanne xxx
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An absolute cracker
crystaldust 31 Dec 17.28
Okay - this one will do.It's a tour de force and you know it, so why not flaunt it as you have? Great fun, great finesse, great poem. Thank you. And a very happy new year! -
EXCELLENT
Have you got a book out.? I would buy it tomorrow,well day after,its boxing day. -
So excellently written, so devinely rhymed.... You are the master, my dear. You ARE the master. Write on, poet.
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Masterful and wordwizardy
Wonderful poetically device-sive
poem - loved it, Silica ... I wish I could describe being Sedna in the very same authoritive way ... 
Be well,
Myra -
Excellent in every way.
So...I feel inferior now. That was excellent in every way, shape, and form, from diction to rhyme to syllable scheme to deeper meaning. Excellent. -
Thank you – I do like to occasionally strew the tintacks around a bit… Language for what else use is it? (Paws for applause.)
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Provided the clown has big sharp teeth, I can live with that – thanks… have a round of applause for an apposite comment!
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Very Jabberwocky-ish! I like that. I'm all about the tangental thinking, so no worries, the out-of-the-box syntax and usage was very loud and clear to me. And the alliteration, very nice. Couldn't have picked a better picture, either. Nice write!
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As I was reading this poem in my hammock, I couldn't help but feel that this is an odd little ditty. For some reason -- I don't know why -- it reminds me of black metal. Even if your accompanying graphic is supposed to bring for an effect of Thomas Kinkade, it is all for naught. I am left with images of orcs and goblins. Blame it on your pseudo archaic language and your odd phrasing, but I couldn't help but want to visit the bearded woman -- even if she really is the most beautiful bearded woman in the world. Hence, whether you like it or not, I feel that there is a circus quality to you work.
ricochet rabbit
president
hammock school of literary criticism -
so you have clambered and climbed and ascended higher and farther then most and found peace in the pursuit of beyond what it to what can be, if one tries to reach further, this is only good and will serve you well...Artis
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haha... very clever, funny, and great alliteration! All in all an enjoyable read.
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This is more than pressed keys, no?
This is excellent poetry, and I love the words you chose.
I know I have seen your name before, but I must've never read your poetry because I think I would remember this.
Well done....
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I enjoyed reading this the way I enjoy the final cold chug of a drink in the summer. The spirit of this was just as strong at the finish as at the start, even more so. Just an enjoyable read.
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I've sat in homes and read the poems
of poets on their travels.
I've woven dreams from travelings
while my own life unravels;
But now I find a kinder mind
is saving me some trouble,
by scaling heights and sharing sights
found here, amongst the rubble.
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That's wonderfully clever! I loved every bit of it; wouldn't change a thing. The alliteration was flawless, and I particularly enjoyed the final line. Great job!
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Whewww! After reading your poem and the first few comments I started to panic! I was feeling tremendous pressure to write a poetic comment in return! This type of poetry is lovely to read and you have done a great job here. I have a very difficult time writing poetry this way...so classic. Excellent job!
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I really love this picture, and i love the flow of this poem, its quite beautiful and i think everything on this whole page just contrasts perfectly, wonderful job on the display, as for the work, it was very powerful, i particularly enjoyed the repeated begining sounds, and im too out of it to remember what thats called, lol... oh well, nice work
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i liek the last few lines.it's a beautiful and original piece.keep it up
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huh? sorry didn't get it... (i'm a wee bit slow)
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It’s very generous of you to give such a eulogy of odes, I really simply seek to stall a superfluity of woes… but admit I do like words, writhed and winched in rhyme, or platted into diverse strands and played at five four time… Oh, and thank you – you are very kind.
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Every person on this site should read you as a requirement before joining AP. It is truly amazing what a person can do when they possess 35000 more words than the average writer here and can then string them together in a interesting and coherant form. I loved this.
David -
Thank you ma’am – you are always too fulsome in your praise and yet point out the thing I most wanted people to enjoy… the applause is for the perceptive eye rather than the ego boost!
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Absolutely exquisite
I always love it when you gambol and frolick in your poesy. You merry the words together so well that few of us can see the tongue you've folded in your cheek. We're too caught up with the cheek with which the tongue was folded. Ah...you are the master, without doubt or quibble. 
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Truly whimsical and playful, and a very nice tribute to the variance of our planet. Long may it turn, however lonely in some spots it may be...
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I've grizzled about grassy hills
I groaned and whined and pleaded
But farmers never listen as
Their hillocks they have seeded.
Why must they stoop to pastures green?
And why not fields of yellow?
I prance gaily but avoid
The cowpats cos they smello! -
Pontificate on Pinnacles
you loud loquacious lord.
While waterfalls are waded
and molten lava's poured.
And when your wandering work is done
and perfect in it's pod
you slam the reader's frank delight
by pronouncing it as odd.
I really enjoyed it! -
It is indeed a forward thing
this represent of up and down,
which drives a bend to crooked,
a smile to curves of frown.
So much ado it then adorns,
on thorns or thicket thistles,
keening kismet knocked on wood
or whispered in bird whistles.
Swerving then to shines of sun
on biege of wheat or barley chaff,
slyly noting tones and shades,
suggestive of all lifts which laugh.
Mecurial perhaps it's not,
more con than consequence,
tho pro it seems is out of reach,
for most who skip the fence.
I'd say it's artish at the best,
projections of the vision's sight,
that gloom the night or gleam the day,
and chart all things that way.
~~Lisa
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Once again you've weaved a wonderful tale, Sir! I'm sorry I've been away so long. I guess I was in one of the downs you talk of here.
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Love the concept and the alliteration. You have a wonderful way with words. Well done.
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perchance it is the barometric changes that bring these seasonal dips and rises ...
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Oh those flaming fickle mood swings,
There's no logic, none at all!
How can one ever be downhearted
In New England in the fall?
Or slouch solemnly by the Taj Mahal
And feel nothing more than glum
Yet be ecstatic in the projects
Whilst one's chatting with a bum?!
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I'm glad to note you didn't feel pompous in the pampas or, most sadly, pedantic (working with professors could have rubbed the wrong way -- a sort of static electricity of the mind).
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This was such an interesting write and concept. This is proof that I must get back to reading and commenting on your work more. Nicely penned.
~ John
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