Look at her, head held high
Upon her face, a beautiful smile
A deeper look behind those eyes
Reveals the pain of a loveless child
Remnants of fear from neglect and abuse
An inquisitive spirit in search of truth
Victimized in ways she had yet to comprehend
Endless suffering at the hands of men
Her suffering was evident at such a young age
The family secret only fueled her rage
The product of a cruel and abusive past
Many would have to suffer her wrath
The wrath of a beauty so young and heartless
Brought many men to their knees regardless
Of their strength or the amount of pride they held
She knew how to break hearts, she did that well
No exceptions were granted to friends either
Family? So what! She cared for you neither
She knew what she did, she could care less
She was hurting, as would the rest
For no one she cared, she held no regard
She had long given up on faith and on god
Numbing every emotion and every feeling
Was her number one method of dealing
With the woes of life and such a cruel world
If only someone had loved this baby girl
Maybe she would have been safe from harm
And would never have sought love in the wrong arms
Maybe she would have lived a life of peace
Maybe she could express herself with ease
Maybe she would know how to show and accept love
Possibly have a relationship with the man above?
As an adult she recognizes the error of her ways
She tries to make a turn around before it’s too late
Tries to make amends for all the pain she’s caused
Tries to establish a relationship with God
Opens up her heart and lets him in
The only man who made it under her skin
One day it occurred to her to pick up a pen
To ask for forgiveness, she needed to repent
Writing became her self therapy
She formed the poet you now see
Who pens her thoughts throughout the night
Known to you as SporadicWrites
Author notes
Written October 8th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetic Biography (contest) by macandrew.
300 points, ended October 16, 2004, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I'm Speechless!
Haha, I'm just WOWed! A beautiful story accompanied by a brilliant poem. Excellent work! I'm bookmarking this! -
9.99/10 :)
this is awesome. the rhyming is really great. i enjoyed the flow, and the lil story behind the poem. it has a lil rap sort of beat!
Great one
thanx for sharing.
~~ille -
touching story, well written, good write.
~Kate -
this is amazing - so emotional and personal and in a way quite positive - i dunno! i just think its great!!
keep writing!
kaz xx -
whoa whoa whoa... that was the most emotional poem ive read... and what i mean by that.. ive never seen anyone open up their thoughts and emotions like i have just read... GOOD JOB.. <3<3
emiley -
9/10
Great Work, I've read quite a few of your poems and commented now and then, you may remember me, who knows. Anyways I think this is a brilliant summation of who you are and it defines your identity as a poet. I really thought this was great work, especially the last little bit, it seemed to me to be the most personal section.
Great Work (pushit) -
gorgeous gorgeous gorgeous!!!!!!!!! if i could give you 1,000 applauds i definatly would. it is amazing to see you grow up and above the hell you went through. you are awsome!
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This is so beautiful-I am literally left speechless
I don't know where to begin, I mean obviously you're an increcible writer, and your message is real, it's like your testimony, I feel like clapping and watch you step down and take a seat while I whisper to the person next to me "so honest,beautiful and encouraging"-thank you for this
ash
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this is very good.. I love it!
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i like this
i like how the colors had popped out at me, felt like my face was on fire, someone call ladder 49. but back to this, this was a deep piece. could almost feel your anger at some point and your sadness. its not easy for people to write about their personal life, but at often the best things written is from the persons experience. keep it elevating -
good
This was nicely done. You really showed the ways of life and maturity.
Maybe she could express herself with ease
(really liked this)
thanks for entering.
John -
Wow. I don't know if there is anything I can truly write that will really do this justice. This was sad. It was touching and it was written in a way that was easily understood. It was quite evident that you were trying to write something to ease your own pain (my interpretation) and to show others what you have been through.
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It was a pleasure to read your stanza's, seeing how they flowed from one to the next and keeping with the train of thought. I read over it a couple of times and upon the second time I found myself getting faster and faster with my reading. Reading about your turmoil through-out life saddened me though I do believe the struggles in life build character within the person. As I read this write I was compelled to say I know you, for I do know of someone just like this. I know her all too well..................
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Great Poem about your self read my poem My love is blind 45% of it's about me the rest is not it's a really good poem just made it p.s the background you got for your poem is the same as minds
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This is definately a great write, personal but great.. though because im not religious the last few stanzias are not as powerfull as the rest of the piece still great write
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Great..is too small of a word
As an adult she recognizes the error of her ways
She tries to make a turn around before it’s too late
Tries to make amends for all the pain she’s caused
Tries to establish a relationship with God
Opens up her heart and lets him in
The only man who made it under her skin
One day it occurred to her to pick up a pen
To ask for forgiveness, she needed to repent
Writing became her self therapy
She formed the poet you now see
Who pens her thoughts throughout the night
Known to you as SporadicWrites
wow...wow...wow...wow..
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Very Good!
Very good biographical poem. Lots of emotion, well said and done. Keep up your relationship with God, and for goodness' sake, keep up with your "therapy." The rest of us will be happy to reap those benefits! -
Wow
Oh My Goodness! This poem is awesome! I hope you dont mind, but i am going to add you to my favorites! I really enjoy the poem, and how you told of her not knowing God and then finding Him later! wow. your poem is truely great! -
a soulful read
We've traveled the same path in many ways...though it took me many years to become rightfully angry about it. I'm glad I picked you for a random read. And I think you deserve a round of applause! -
Very good
An excellent poem. It gives readers a chance to see why you are where you are today. Well writtten and beautifully put together. -
Lander, thanks a bunch for your well wishes. I really appreciate it. This piece is very personal so yes you do know a little about me. However, I am very complex (this is where the name Sporadic comes from) and this is just a little peep. I somehow thought a narrative would be better, like an outsider looking in on my own life. Glad you like it!
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Thanks for reading my poem...It was very difficult to write. It made me very emotional to write about some of these things but I feel a great sense of accomplishment now when I look at it. I can see how much I've grown as a person and as a writer. It feels like a release... Thanks again
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Wow...this is really good. Full of emotion and...just...very, very good. Unique, powerful....I think I know a little bit about who you are now. Best of luck in the contest and have a lovely day!
-Lander
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Wow... That's a really well written poem! I"m totally impressed. I was thinking about entering this contest, but haven't as writing about who I am just never seems to work for me. I don't know you at all, but I definately feel like I've been given a glimpse inside of you.
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BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO!
DAMN DEE!!!This poem rocks!. So now we know how Sporadicwrites earned her name. This was absolutely wonderful, unique and plain brilliant. If this poem doesn't win the gold or place, then I know that somethings definitely ain't right. Sporadic has come a long way. A toast to you Sporadicwrite, I raise my glass of champagne to you for you have earned the right to celebrate a new you as you open up your heart to establish a new relationship with God. Keep on pennig and releasing those pent up feelings, the therapy is working wonders becaue this write is off the hook Lol.
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Whoa. I don't remember you telling me about this one, though. In any case, this rocks. The narration is brilliant. Writing DOES help one release his/her inner frustrations in a constructive way. Keep it up.
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DAMN!!! this is good!!! I've never read anything quite like it!!! this is the best poem I have ever read!!! OMG!!! I'm speachless!!
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eh, aint women a ... nevermind
this is a great dynamic character. interesting the way you put it. that her writing is her self therapy. good luck.
~Sanity~
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