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Blue Eyes

He confronts the world with courage

And a little bit of doubt

You can tell he hasn’t figured

Just what life’s all about.


He believes in love immortal

In family, and in God

He understands that beauty

Can be a cruel façade


He’s young, but he has lived some

Knows that truth can lurk in lies

But, he hasn’t seen enough of life

To dim the sparkle in his eyes


Stormy blue encircles black

With a ring of darker light

And when he laughs eyes sparkle true

But anger makes rare ice ignite.


He’s frank about the future

And knows just what he wants

He’s a doer and a seeker

Not plagued by doubters haunts.


He’s old enough to know

That love is worth the fee

And anything with value

Won’t be found for free


He loves to entertain folks

Always ready with a joke

But he’ll lend a hand with fixing

Anything that’s broke


A pair of blue eyes stared

From a picture, filled with awe

I never met the man

But this is who I saw.



Patricia Gibson-Williams

 

Author notes

This was written for a contest in which a photo of someone’s eyes (and little else) was shown.  The contest was to tell who the eyes belonged to.  Are the eyes the windows of the soul?  I wrote this off the top of my head.  I wanted to give my first impression, instead of thinking about it.  Patti
Written October 8th, 2004

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  • Touchof1der silver member
    October 17, 2004
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    This is simply stunning. There is such confidence and assuredness in this. It makes one feel as if you already know the person. I love it! Great flow and rhythm throughout. Excellent poetry! Good luck in the contest!


  • Whisper Mckee
    October 9, 2004
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    I love the flow of this ...and besides your the first I've read that saw the eyes as male.


  • pulsating
    October 8, 2004
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    i always love the way your poems end, but the whole thing is just great. This is terrific. take care, Olivia


  • freewill
    October 8, 2004
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    i like this. its a great write.. thanks for entering and good luck