newspaper headline
another murdered woman
mud Java silently drunk
by Gregg Rowe
newspaper headline
another murdered woman
mud Java silently drunk
newspaper headline
another murdered woman
mud Java silently drunk
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Written October 7th, 2004
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Isn't it strange how every morning we read the news and are not affected by it but one item will catch our attention and we can be moved to tears. I like the juxtaposition of morning coffee and news in this. I like the way you have made the coffee something unpleasant.
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Sounds like a daily morning, how unnaffected we are by what were once tragedies. Now these events are often passed by as we sat at our kitchen tables and continue onto the sports section.
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Good morning, Gregg!
This makes me want a cup of coffee! The imagery is great, I think the last line lends itself to many different interpretations depending on the reader. There is one thing though, that troubles me. I could be wrong, but I thought senryus had to be 5-7-5 or less; your last line has 7 syllables. Leaves me kind of scratching my head. However, you know more than I do about form poetry and perhaps you're just invoking poetic license? 
It's good to see you posting again. 
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Oooo awesome. I love it, its heavy.
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i kept re-reading the last line, trying to figure out what it said, each time i read it i came up with something else, the coffee making them numb, the coffee slurring the words on the page, the coffee turning to mud in their mouth, had there been a rash of killings, did they casually know the victim and hadnt heard or was this the killer, reading the headline i dont know gregg, but i like it in all respects.
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Excellent
Humerous, in a strange black-comical way. It's a great Senryu, very dark though, and makes the reader linger of the last few syllables. Keep up the great work, this one was great to read
I applaud you sir
Take care, Kate
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It's nice and short but it's a perfect scene of someone sitting at their table, reading the newspaper and feeling down about what it says. Good stuff.
~*Poesia *~
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