Calling me again
You miss me?
You need me?
Crying to have me back
I should take you back?
Oh really? Why?
Because you cry?
How many tears have I shed?
Did they ever move you?
They empowered you
Made you into a bigger monster
Gave you more control
Made you more of a man
Tears I cried
Made you into a bigger monster
Gave you more control
Made you more of a man
Tears you cry
Don’t move me at all
Don’t make me feel bad
Don’t make me happy
Don’t make me want you back
Confirms my feelings
I want you gone
Out of my life
So I can move on
And be happy again
Open up my heart
Be complete
Smile again
Be myself again
Experience true love
Even if I get hurt
I have to live
No more tears
Over you
I simply refuse
Author notes
Written October 5th, 2004
A contest entry
- Group Contest MSAPB by AVoiceWithin.
400 points, ended November 11, 2004, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oh this is wonderful. I always say this to myself but cry anyway..even though I always tell people guys arent worth your tears. Its hard sometimes you know? When you love someone anyway..
But great poem, I applaud the persistance. Guys are morons..*sigh* hehe loved it.
Jenn
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Excellent Heartfelt Write
If there's anything I've learned in life is that crying doesn't solve anything. Tears are emotions that that spills from our eyes and even our hearts when we are feeling hurt or trying to elicit sympathy from someone. You've managed to capture the hurt and pain that many of us are feeling but you've also shown stength to not allow someone elses tears to control your emotions or sway your thinking about them. You are an awesome poet who knows how to bring your emotions to the screen. I enjoyed this write and I apologize for my procrastination.
Keep up the great work, I know you have a lot more to offer. Avril
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Oh my gosh, this is amazing, I loved it! it flowed with such passion!
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Well That was absolutely amazing my friend!.. That basically sums up everything I've been trying to get across for the longest time.. but lets not go into details on me..
This is definately moving! I was pushed back a bit by the powerful language you used, each short stanza was to the point and practically bitch slapped me! I like that! Great job hun.. I'm book marking this one!
Thanks for sharing with me!
Ish
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Hmm...I wrote something similar to this a few weeks ago. This has a very great deal of emotion in it. I feel bad when I read stuff like this, because I know guys like this. Ah well. Good work, and keep it up.
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Very Good.
Very good write. Nice use of repition and the raw emotion is very in your face. And theres an economy of words that I personally like. Meaning you don't toss in fluff words just because you can, it not only improves the flow but also gives greater impact to the words that ARE present. -
wow the poem is great i sence all the emotion in it. I just wrote one that had emotion and if you can give it a look at it is called I am...
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excellent
this is a great poem, i really like it, theres alot of emotion in it. i can totally understand where your coming from with this.
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Wow, this is very powerful... I've felt this way in many a relationships.... I've found out that people like to take my kindness for a weakness.... I refuse to cry now... Each tear that has ever waited to be poured out upon my shirt sleave are turned down. This is brillant. Keep your head up and the pen down. FalseReality
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Awww, how sad.
so emotional. I love it. I have felt that state of confusion on how somebody could treat you this way and in the end it makes them feel more powerful. Beautiful.
-sTaTic-
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