I've always felt lonely and worthless
And thought that no one would care
I thought no one would ever love me
That no one would want to be there
I have friends who do their best
But sometimes they're not enough
I need someone to kiss and hold me
When living gets too tough
You came up to me one day
While I was releasing my silent cry
You told me I was pretty and held me
I thought that I would die
You kissed my forehead, then my lips
Told me you'd go for me
I looked at the ground, blushing
Finding it hard to believe
I didn't think you'd feel that way
So I wonder if it's true
I know you flirt and kiss others
How can I trust you?
I don't know why, but it hurts me
Tearing my heart inside
I want to tell you how I'm feeling
But I can't, though I've tried
I don't understand what I feel
I've been told that it's love
But I'm too broken to feel that way
I'm a tainted, red dove
I'm starting to wonder if I can
If I really love you
But I have one other problem
Do you love me too?
Author notes
Written October 1st, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
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300 points, ended February 21, 2005, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This was actually a poem Melan wrote for Mystique after they first met.
Melan's such a cutie.
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This is so sad and beautifully written. You have really empathy and can really put yourself in other's places. This was a wonderful piece Rose.
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I've never really been through what this poem expresses, but thank you for your kind words and you're welcome.
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this is very heartfelt and emotional. I really felt where you were coming from, not being able to believe it when you're loved, etc. Thanks for your comment -
wow this is soo good i really liked it and CONGRATS!!!! you really deserved it!!!!!!! Good luck with your other poems!!!!!
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awwww that' so sweet! You deserved gold! This was such......a great poem....and I understand how you feel, (even though I hate saying that). I've been there that. LOVE the background.
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the background is soooo prety....so is the rose...and i loved ur poem...its sad...and haunting...but flows and is honest....good job
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also thanks for entering my contest!
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Omgsh!!! This was one of the greatest poems about love i've ever read and the rose and the backround add a wonderful mood. It's a typical feeling but the way you've desribed it made it a masterpiece!! anyways great job!! and good luck!!
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wow...i really like this. i love how you've put it together and how everything is held in place
good luck in the contest
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I really like this poem. I wouldn't neccesarily call it haunting, but it really touches my soul. I can relate to it so well its not even funny. I think your a good writer. Good Luck!
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This is a really nice write. I think it is sort of haunting too...in the way it makes the reader consider the situation they are in as well..for your reflection upon your own has that effect upon the reader. I think so anyways.
Good job...good luck
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aww yea i really like this poem , thanks for entering it in my contest , yea i feel exactly what your saying in this poem it sums up a situation im used to being in thanks again for entering it , im judging is on the 5th if not b4
luv x j x
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very sad read...good job with writing it...worth the read
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tragic masterpiece
such a haunting piece.
i am reminded again of my lonely desire to be held,and my fear of shallow words said to lead me astray only to be left aloft.
a wonderfully written sorrow.
-cheers
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