I hear your voice sound in the night
Crying softly, please come to me
Hush, my love, lie safe in my arms
Be not afraid
All fears allayed
Your heart speaks to mine without words
Speaks of what you have to offer
Speaks of all the promise of life
Love fills our days
With joy always
We look to see
What yet will be
As we journey through this life
Overcoming trial and strife
Breathing in the love we share
Trusting with our hearts laid bare
Through the years as I watch love grow
Hearts entwined, we face together
All of the struggles life holds in store
We can endure
If love’s kept pure
Our hearts we bind
Our life to find
Only time can tell if we are
Destined by love to reach a star
We can sail the ocean’s wave crest
We know by the One we are blest
When our journey’s close to the end
We can rest just knowing we are
Now to step into eternity
Go hand in hand
Heaven’s a land
We’ll walk that shore
Now, evermore
Author notes
Choice number 6.
You can find the tune that this song is based on at:
www.lostsoul.net/howards/midi/enya-midi/enyamidi/misc/willows.mid used with permission. You will need to open a new window and copy and paste. It is much better with the music.
This was an entry for the contest "Love Contest" by Hot Angel 777
Did not win.
Written May 11th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- soft and gentle by honey bear.
600 points, ended January 20, 2007, 17 entries
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very good
thank yo ufor entering this very lovely write and good luck in the contest this has very good flow to it and is a very lovely sweet poem
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good write good luck you need to change the font cause it's hard to read
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its a very good poem good luck int he contest keep up the good writting..krystle..
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this is a really good poem nice rhyme scheme to it well nice write and good luck in the contest
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I do not see where the rhyming is off. Only the last two lines of each stanza are supposed to rhyme. And the aabb of the bridge. As for punctuation, I have been accused of using too much, so, I toned down this one, as the way it is written, it is not as big an issue. Where needed before the end of a line, I did use it. I suppose I can chalk this up to another lost cause. Thanks anyway
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Good
this poem has a beautiful meaning and is simply lovely, but it lacks punctuation almost all the way through, except for the last line.. i'm realy one for punctuation in at least part of the poem. I also think your rhyme is off a bit, but other than that this is nice and i like it!
Thanks you for entering my contest and good luck to you!
~Lathwen -
Thank you. This started out as a lullaby, but turned into a song about our love.
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this is filled with love which is exactly what i'm looking for. great job. thanks for entering and good luck in te contest.
kayz
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What a reassuring, sweet tribute to undying love. Great job.
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Well, thank you. I think I have four songs here, in my list. Three of them have music. I just get inspired by music. I do most of my writing to it, whether poetry or fiction. Glad you liked it and thank you for reading and commenting.
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Splendid! You'd make a terrific lyricist. I'm astonished at your gift with sentiments in your poetry. I will, when I have time, come back to listen to the midi as I read
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Great job! Keep at it...
- Claide -
I really enjoy you. I have a stong belief in God, but I don't want or believe in eternal life. So I don't care for the forever stuff and most marriages fail. Still I like it. I will think more.
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Di,thank you very much.
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A very beautiful poem, all the best in the comp, hugs Di
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Where are the problems? I checked. All the lines meant to rhyme do, and rather strongly. I am not sure what I need to work on.
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This is really very good. You have some problems with the rhyme. If you're going to rhyme, it should be consistent. You have a great poem here that can be a winner. I hope you'll work on the rhyme. Thank you for entering and good luck. Hugs, Patricia
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Thank you. I appreciate that others can appreciate my efforts.
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This is beautiful! Truely an inspiring poem about love. Congratulations on the trophy.
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Toltec Warrior -
Thank you for your kind comment. And, yes, I suppose it would. It is a safe bet that he did not understand it. He never does. And I hope you listened with the music.
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A beautiful picture of a true and everlasting love. Parts of this poem would be just perfect for re-newed vows or for 50th Anniversaries. Wonderful flow also. Good job and good luck! God Bless, Penny
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It was like reading the end of a romance novel, very good.
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Aw... that is cute. It is gorgeous and the tune to the song (yes, I actually clicked on it) is just lovely. The words you use just captivate me and I think I will remember these lines for a long long time...
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