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Why don't I sleep at night?
Dreams cursed by second sight
My thoughts are in the past
And the night I saw you last.
Why'd he steal you from me?
My twin sister Attie
Turned true love fatality
Now together again
I guess we'll never be
So you better...
Run Attie
You'd better run, run, run Attie
Please don't let this be
Please just run for me
You better run, you better run.
Now I'm hunting for you
From crowds I pick a few
Then I fill up my cage
The Shen-Ring of my rage
But they don't ever last
Like a storm-battered mast
I turn them into you.
To show that my love's true
So you'd better, better...
Run Attie
You'd better run, run, run Attie
Please don't let this be
Please just run for me
You better run, you better run
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Author notes
It can be heard at www.gangbox.com
under mp3's.
Written October 4th, 2004
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Reminds me of the Doors' song "Not to Touch the Earth"
They have that running part in there, too. Oh, yeah, the Velvet Underground as well "Run run run". I just want you to know that I haven't read even one bad poem on your website yet.
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as much as i hate this sight sometimes your work weather it be songs or poetry has always been emaculate to me....over the years i've enjoyed it emensley.....you are by far the best poet on allpoetry....that's what i have to say, anyways all is well over here hope your life is worth while....peace....clammy.
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It's always pleasant speaking with the literate youth of today, gives me hope, and smiles. How's your Christmas? So far, I've smoked out of an apple, written a song, contemplated a turkey, and gotten angry at a bowl of unsalted pistacios (which should be outlawed). 'Tis heaven.
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Great
I really like this, but I like everything on your site. It's very good and I'd like to take this opportunity to thank you.
I really appreciate the comments, because you're much more experienced than I may ever be. And as quickly as I'm becoming quite a fan of yours, I am ecstatic about corresponding with you. Just an all-around thanks. -
Howdy Horus:
Too bad my computer is too slow to pick it up for a listen. Glad to see someone work so hard at their craft. Hey, just thought I'd share something interesting, I had a Great Great Aunt named Addey, and a cuz named Addie, after her; not a common name, but a cute one in my opinion. Attie, is pretty close to the same. ¦:¬)
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Nice rythm, can hear the beat from the read, nice job.
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But they don't ever last
Like a storm-battered mast
The lyrics are great...i'm going to listen to the song now -
This really does read just like a song. You have nice rhyme and the repitition really gets the point across.
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have to agree with granni creative with a little story that can be interptd in a few different way
love and light
blaze -
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this is really good i loved reading it its like a story kinda thats really intruiging. good write.
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Creative and well written.
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I love the rhythm of this. Obviously as lyrics a certain flow is demanded anyway but it works really well. I'm not 100% sure what it's about though! Ha! Something quite sinister lurks in this write though I think. Well written! Jon
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Wow, this is amazing. I downloaded the song and I'm impressed. I dont often see lyrics as well constructed as this..And the song was brilliant, I loved the voice...Very..Haunting (in a good way
) Good job, my applauds to you.
~Lana
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i can completely imagine this great poem as a found. the loved the repitition, and the name Attie repeated over and over again. Very haunting. the rhyming was alright, i loved the part "But they don't ever last
Like a storm-battered mast
I turn them into you." best line in the whole thing. great job.
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wow, this is good, i enjoyed, and it would b very good as a song the word choice and word flow were wonderful, spelling seemed to be perfect, allong with perfect wording, everything seemed to b placed neatly, and you kept me reading wich is very good... keep writing
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Why don't I sleep at night?
Dreams cursed by second sight
My thoughts are in the past
And the night I saw you last.
Why'd he steal you from me?
That is my favorite part of the poem/song. It really speaks to me and caught my attention right off the back. This song is vety intriguing. I am not sure if its a well known one or not. But it's definately one that I'll have to check out. You did a wonderful job on this. Thank you for sharing this with everyone, had you not, I never would of known about this song. much less take the time to look for it.
Smoochie
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Wow. Very interesting, intriguing. I might listen to the song, depending on whether or not it will load on my craptastical computer. I loved the rhythm it had, I wish I had the talent for song lyrics like you. Great write, keep it up!
Rhythmwolf -
Intrigueing. This, I feel is slightly more worthy of applause. I like the flow of it...
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No, it's a song, not a case study.
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(disclaimer: not fraternizing so don't worry at all!!!!) so, does this reflect incest? but isn't that what alastor's father wanted from attie? so why would alastor be like that?
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maybe your poetry isnt that bad sorry
brandon -
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This was really an interesting read. I will make a point to listen to it as well...
Itried to access it on your webpage but had difficulties. I will bookmark this and try again later,
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Superb
I enjoyed reading the poem, as a song it would be awesome. Excellent work, flow and rhyme to the words that melt into you.
Georges -
I didn't, they just share the same title, it's the soundtrack
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I read this a while back, but before it was a screenplay in santa monica and fairfax I think, what happened why did you change it to a song, did you rename the other screenplay to something else? None the less I like the lyrics...
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Interesting write...I'll check out the mp3! Sad yet hopeful. The Chorus is particularly well done!
Cheers!
Laura -
No, it's done, I'm just lazy.
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well, it makes me think of lots of things, and most of them are connected with the poems abour your moms.
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i read the script that was posted here...and thought it very good but incomplete. Is it in the works?
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Oh yeah, I liked this one, lol. The refrain was awesome...I don't know why but I felt like it was something out of Areosmith...but that could just be me, lol. ANyhoo, this was really cool and when I get the chance, I'll definitely check it out in real song form!
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