How does one explain
Their own internal pain
No one seems to understand
No one seems to care
To show just how Im feeling
Pink scars I do now wear
Everyday they're hidden
The public unaware
'Cause if they saw I know for sure
It'd give them all a scare
But They've no need to worry
For death's not my intent
To feel the pain is all I need
To keep myself content
When life provides a burden
Which words cannot express
When the pain becomes to heavy
To bear upon my chest
All I have to do
Is take the blade and press
And it provides a feeling
That's quite unlike the rest
It relieves the anger
And it relieves the stress
I can rid my body
Of all life's little tests
Then once I've forgotten all the pain
And forgotten all the strife
I can simply smile
And then set down the knife
And ignore all of the feelings
And go on with my life
Untill it all comes back to me
Late another night
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Written October 4th, 2004
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yes, that's what i'm talking about. i can really relate to this piece except it was a safety pin i would take to my skin, just to pick at my skin and why i did it was exactly what you put in your poem. not to try to kill myself but for the feel of it....thanks for sharing this piece. it's so so true.
keep writing and keep up the work!!!
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Good job on this. This really isnt your typical cutting poem, but it does describe the typical cutter. Anyway, I like it.
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very good!~Benji
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whoa.. fraky lol
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hmm. cutting poems arent really my idiom, but this one turned out pretty good. The rhyme pattern worked very well in most of it, but in a few places it felt forced. Specifically, where you reorganized your words so the rhyme was at the end. But on the whole, I liked it. Good write.
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What a powerful poem...The rhyming was absolutly wonderful!Everything went right along smoothly...each line ...each word..as if it was meant to be written just like that..Perfect!
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I like your style of writing...This isn't your typical "cutting" poem...You have written about the human emotion side of it and what goes on inside your mind and you did it beautifully...I applaud you on sharing your pain and inner torment...This is truly a meaningful piece.
Victoria Lin
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