Flight paths, meet, as one with
the eternal binding of these,
flights of fancy 'mere glance
at another.
Statuesque necks, reach as in
motion, whilst wings beat as if
in time; Down, as soft as petals
nest their young together;
As one dies, the other mourns;
Never, searching for another;
Empty shells, of a once perfect
pair;
Rising aloft, they circle as in
a ballet, drifting on warm currents;
Dipping and diving adding grace
to grace personified.
Author notes
This is a present for a good friend....
Written October 4th, 2004
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You are very welcome
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Thanks Jen.... glad you enjoyed this, it's one of my favourites
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thanks for swappin' dedication poems
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beautiful...just beautiful
your words flowed so smoothly; so tranquil and eloquent
your imagery was superb
excellent write
Jen
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Oh, good!!! Glad to hear that...you are both such wondrous folks...LOL I once introduced a husband...to his wife!!! Oh well, I had great instincts, anyway...hehehe 
TTYL!!! 
Wanda
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lol, yes jaunty and I have met
James has kindly read some of my work and vice versa..... thanks for the intro 
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hehehe Hello, Sweetheart...ya didn't know Lynne wrote this for me, didja??? LOL My former screen name is swaneewanda...swan, my Friends call me... Thanks for giving this lovely poem such a glowing review, m'Love...Lynne, this is Jaunty...Jaunty, this is Lynne...both of ya are Good People...& very talented, as well...not to mention having such Grand Hearts...James, on my author's page, there's a list of all of these wonderful poems...sigh I love you guys... Wanda
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Thank you I also appreciate the beauty of the swans, not just in appearance but also in their life styles. Many thanks for your kind words, they are appreciated
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What a lovely gift to create for someone. The structure is polished and the topic is one of my favorite. Swans are magical creatures. This is very beautifully done
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Thank you Jonny Nice to see you back I always appreciate your kind words
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Thank you James, I liked the reference to "Pottery" as I like to try to structure poems to the way I am, not as they should be.... Many thanks for your kind words, they are appreciated
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Thank you Ferenc I am pleased that you enjoyed this poem. I had a beautiful subject to work with Many thanks for your comments, they are appreciated
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outstanding job
your fan
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You have structured such words here slick and fortuned to find my eyes at the blazing words. The picture is absolutely darling, a beautiful adornment to an already gorgeous piece.
Well made like pottery built on the wheel and displayed on shelf.
- James
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Very beautiful!
I loved "Empty shells, of a once perfect
pair"...(!)
It sounds like a song this...
Well done!
Cheers!
Ferenc -
Thank you I appreciate your kindness have just been checking out your Author's page, IT IS AWSOM!!!!!!! LOL
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LYNNE!!! Then again, they may LOVE it on sight, too!!! & I do!!! I put the link for this one & 'The Wise one' on my author's page...sigh Such a wondrous Poet Lady you are!!! 
Wanda
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Thank you Purple rose, I always look forward to reading your comments, I do appreciate them, thank you for taking the time
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Thank you Elizabeth I am glad that you enjoyed this poem, it is one of my favourite subject (Nature)
I always appreciate your comments, many thanks
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You are very welcome I am delighted that you enjoyed this poem .It seems very fitting for a "Swannee" to have a poem of your own Takecare
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Thank you Richard, I am glad that you found a depth within this poem, when I wrote it, it just arrived, but after when I re0read it, I also found more than I had originally planned. Many thanks for your kind words
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Great
Your work just keeps increasing in depth and beauty! This a brilliant piece, you had some very interesting lines, all wonderful. This was a really great piece, I loved what you did with such a beautiful animal, you it into the theme of your lovely poem! Fantastic work, I loved this!
Purplerose
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Whoa! Excellent. This poem has such wonderful imagery, where do I begin? I love the last line, "to grace personified." Poems should end gracefully (with a soft and meaninful sigh, as yours did) with perfect wording. Kudos. : )
Cheers,
SilentScar
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ABSOLUTE PERFECTION, MY FRIEND!!!
Oh, LYNNE!!! You SWEETHEART!!! Look what you went & did...for me!?! 
X 1,000!!! sigh This is so very lovely...a beautiful poem...from a beautiful Soul...this, m'dear, is Literature at its finest...I absolutely LOVE it!!! Thank you SO much, my Friend!!! sniffs I'm gonna cry now... 
Well, maybe I'll GRIN REALLY BIG instead!!! Wow, Lady...what a lovely person you are...bows M'Lady...
HOMAGE
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I am always impressed with the passion of your work...even when disguised as a pastoral poem. For me this has much more depth than is obvious at first glance. This was written for Swans who mate for life, so similar to humans (even if we don’t often achieve it) I see the lovely duality and admire the subtly within your skillful abilities. The fact that you speak of the swans “flight path” reminds me of how circumstantial our meetings are and how we too have these flights into each other’ lives. Excellent internal rhymes and gentle flow; and for me, this is one of your very finest. An enjoyable read. Blessings and best wishes ~richard
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I am pleased that you enjoyed this poem Many thanks for your very kind words, they are appreciated
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Firt, I like the picture, it is very beautiful. I like the poem too, I think is indeed very beautiful. Keep up the good work and thank you for sharing it
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I hope so still you never know they might hate it on sight
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welcome and hope ya friend likes it, eh?
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Thank you I am glad you liked the picture that I borrowed Many thanks for your kind words
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Thank you Rambler, The swans have such a natural grace and even to write about them is inclined to demean them a little, so I am pleased that you enjoyed this poem
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"As one dies, the other mourns;
Never, searching for another;
Empty shells, of a once perfect
pair;"
the fan/ pic & this work is grand!
Edited on Oct 04, 5:01 p.m. because ''.
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Beautiful write, beautiful visual to match. I love those picturesque fans. I especially found the final two lines very poetic and intuitive.
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Thank you I am glad you enjoyed this poem
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I really like this peice... I found some alliteration and I LOVE alliteration hehe!.. it creates a vivid picture.. its awesome
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