"The worst is over now"
The pain is fading
The dream I had shifts shapes
Becomes an entity all its own
And I can't cry
The knot in my stomach won't allow it
The knot where your warmth used to be
"And I can breathe again"
Keep me strong, cause there's no going back
Even if it were possible
I've given up too much
Too much of my dignity, my sanity
Myself
"I wanna hold you high and steal your pain away..."
My pain
It saps, leeches out of me
Drop by agonizing drop
Burning like sea salt in a wound torn too much
Between love and hate
And buffeting waves
"There's so much left to learn..."
Like how the hell am I going to deal with this?
Day in and day out, phasing in like a bad radio signal
Trying to find a comfortable place
In a heart made for two
This heart formed by you
"And no one left to fight"
Damn right there's not. Cause I'm tired of it. Tired of being a coward. Guess I'll just have to swallow it.
"Cause I'm Broken when I'm lonesome"
"And I don't feel right when you're gone away..."
Author notes
The song "Broken" is copyrighted to the band Seether, and I own no part of it.
Written October 3rd, 2004
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Lol, I love the Amy Lee version! I saw Evanescence in concert when they came to Madison...have you ever been to one of their shows? They're awesome...thanks for the awesome comment, I don't think you're rusty at all.
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Well, just so there's no confusion...
I thought I was over someone, then I wasn't, then I kicked myself in the rear and told myself to re-Get over it, and for good this time. I think I talked myself into it 
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i think this is a wonderful poem, the entire time i was reading you had my mind serching for meanings, searching for pictures,
i am confused when i read it, and confused in the end, i think you getting over someone, then in the end i believe you go back,
it dosen't matter what is meant, i think the emotion behind the piece is confusion, so it is a great think that i felt it reading it,
hope i got it right,
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"Broken" by Seether is one of my favorite songs in all the world! I like it even better now that Amy Lee from Evanescence is also singing in it too. Evanescence is my favorite band! Anyway, I LOVE how you put some of the lyrics to that song in your poem. And on top of that, you're poem was awesome without the lyrics. Each stanza reflects what the lyrics to the song mean. You're very talented. Even if it's just what comes to your mind. I haven't commented in a while, so I'm a little rusty. Great Poem!!
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8/10
I liked your three middle stanzas best.
So much torment...such wonderful imagery.
I feel the last stanza (it's really more of a set of fragments and such than a stanza) needs work, though. Maybe you could format it better.
Keep writing.
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