I was hungry
you ignored my cry
I was thirsty
you ignored my cry
I needed to be held
you left me
kicking and screaming
in a cage that is suposed
to bring comfort
where I couldn't get out
you ignored my cry
I was stinky and sweaty
and you forced me to live
in my own stink
you ignored my cry
From the very beginning
you gave me a twisted
warped view of life,
denying my every instinct
emptiness instead of fulfillment
dryness instead refreshment
alienation instead of love
imprisonment instead of freedom
helplessness instead of choice
Now I'm coming back
for revenge.
You just wait.
II
Adults are stupid,
they think babies just
lie there, and don't
have a clue what's
going on.
wrong.
Babies know if they're cute
or not,
loved,
or not,
popular,
or not.
They know when an adult
picks them up because
they want to,
or have to.
True babies talk by crying,
it's the only way they know
how to say what they feel,
crying's not just about hunger
or being wet,
or being sick,
it's about me, the baby
telling you the adult
how I feel.
You may think,
nah, this can't be true.
People don't have memories
about how people treated them
as a baby.
Wrong.
Trust me, your body does,
and it doesn't forget.
I'll never forget how you
hated to pick me up,
because I wasn't cute,
I wasn't charming,
I wasn't happy, or
hilarious,
I didn't smile,
I wasn't loved.
III (Part Three coming up)
Author notes
Sick and twisted, as you asked- even the rhyme is so sick and twisted you can't even tell it's there.
This picture was done by: allpoetry.com/poets/Bigmammajen
Written by me on October 3rd, 2004
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this is a great write thankyou for entering
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This is really creepy, You should write a part two,
When baby attacks!
I love the last stanza:
"Now I'm coming back
for revenge.
You just wait."
Thanks for entering
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I took your adivice. I wrote part two. Part three coming up.
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i like this in a definatly sick and twisted kind of way hmmm wow, well good luck
chrissy -
wow this is an excellent write. very twisted and dark, it seems that there should be a part 2 of this poem, detailing in the description of the revenge and the satisfaction gained from it.
awesome write.
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This is wonderfully written and I'd love to hear what the revenge is very well done best of luck to you in the contest
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Fascinating write
Fascinating write and very interesting picture. Sounds like Chucky hasnt recovered much here! Otherwise this is written well and is quite thought provoking. Mark -
well it's deadpan black humor.
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Chucky wanna-be?? Can you say omg! Not funny {loved the poem tho} But maybe you should enter in something funny, but you have the random part down! Keep penning and good luck!
best wishes~hugs n kisses~heather -
That came over as really creepy, i can see where your coming from with the black humor but it wasn't really what i was looking for
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oooops. I forgot to change that, lol. You are right! I should have thought to have written this in baby language- that would have added a humorous edge to it!
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hahahaha in a scary sorta way... 'humgry' fits really well by the way, in fact i almost think there should be a few more typos as this is coming from a baby LOL... too fun!
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humgry- too funny. Thanks for pointing that typo out!
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wow!!! Scarily great write. Was it meant to say "humgry" in the first line or hungry?
I don't think I have read anything like this from you before but it is as good as the others you write. YTOu are truly talented an dgifted with words -
ooh, freaky...
Wow. Creeeeepy. I got an odd kinda Chucky-vibe lookin' at the pic, and that alone was enough to freak me out.
But I got to say, your piece goes well with the picture, definitely. This poem has a dark, haunting truth about it...y'know, what goes around comes around. Kinda reminds me of how some people treat their pets, you know? We all know the story of how a person gets a puppy, then doesn't give the puppy anything it needs, i.e. affection, grooming, freedom, etc., eventually starts getting kicked around by the owner, and then grows up into one bitter, mean ol' dog with an eye for revenge...But enough of my babble. This was really cool...freaky, great, interesting, LOL, you pick the word, it was all of 'em. Congrats on it.
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Wow! I was going to say, where did you find a picture like that? I liked this, very creative. I wouldn't know what to write for a picture like that but I think you did a fine job. Tell your teacher I say you should get an A
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excellent
Ohhh Mommy's in for a surprise!
Well done here!
You gave the picture some good depth, and a reason for being with your words.
That is good when writing to any image.
You did the picture very good justice!
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