As I stand in front of the gate,
Wondering if it is too late
They call and beckon
"Please help! Please help!"
I struggle not to go.
I pray and I hope.
Please do not take me.
Please don't make me go.
I am too young.
I need to live life.
As my feet move against my will,
I start to wonder
...is it too late?
Will I have regrets?
And I sigh as I let them,
As I let those vicious souls
Hand me the tacky basket
And tell me to take her
Out to trick-or-treat.
Author notes
This, I hope, will win me a 1/2/3 place in the contest!
Written October 3rd, 2004
A contest entry
- Scare us with a twist... (New Member Contest- October) by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended November 2, 2004, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I like the ending on this one the twist was good. thank you for entering and good luck!
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Never suspected a thing with your ending! This was a fun read for me. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
~Willow~ -
Cute Halloween
i didnt think das wut da ending would b like. i really didnt kno wut to expect, but it wuz a cute twist. i think i used to b like dat wit mah brother, lol. good luck!! -
Very good write! I did not anticipae where you were going with that at all. I really liked the twist at the end. And believe me I can relate -- I have 5 kids of my own and have done my share of trick or treating with them all!
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Excellent poem
I was hooked from beginning to end
Good luck in the contest and thank you for entering
Susan~~~ -
Ooooh well written! I didnt quite know what i was expecting at the end - good luck in the contest!
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I was expecting that ending. Too me it just screamed older sibling whining. Good job.
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nice twist....i wasn't guessing that at all...i was guessing something along those lines....but not quite that...nice job...and GOOD LUCK...!!!!
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As an older sister I had to take my little sister just about everywhere with me - oh how it got on my nerves - in England we didn't celebrate halloween back then but it was always a chore to drag her along. this reminded me so much of those days, it made me smile at the memory.
I like your entry, good luck with this.
~Von~ -
Honestly, I thought that it was going to be a kid that was scared to go trick-or-treating, not one that didn’t want to take someone else to do it.
Kind of like the last lines could very well have been:
Dress me in a tutu
Hand me a magic wand
Expecting me to say
Trick-or-treat
Or something along those lines.
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Thank you! Just wondering... what were you expecting?
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I liked how you did this one. It had a good twist at the end, but I was expecting something a little different. You did a nice job with this.
~ John
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