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Paradise lost

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The eyes that see what we can see
are blessed

The ears that hear soft birdsong clear
are blessed

The hands that hold a newborn child
are blessed

The love that's shared between two souls
are blessed

The heart that beats with strength
is blessed

And if these things are not our own
the eyes that do not see
the childless or the deaf or maimed
a loveless state with sickness too
These things are here they always are
perhaps they always were

So when encountered lend a hand
don't turn the other way

Reach out your hand or just a smile
tell them you are here to stay.........

Author notes

A little gentle reminder.......
Written October 3rd, 2004

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  • cutiepie gold member
    December 19, 2004
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    I am delighted that you did.... I found another mistake also overlooked Many thanks

  • ColinSJones
    December 19, 2004
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    this is a novel take on the beattitudes and a great reminder that we should count our blessings each day ...sorry to correct you but "The love thats" needs an apostrophe ~ col
  • Buchan
    October 5, 2004
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    very good poem expressing so much wisdom....thank you

  • cutiepie gold member
    October 4, 2004
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    There are many ways to reach out and touch someone, it doesnt have to be in the physical sense, it can be just providing a smile, or remembering a birthday , a silly postcard, anything so that the person realises that someone cares
  • Hoppalong
    October 3, 2004
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    SOmeting I could never do, reach out to touch someone. Thanks for the reminder.

  • cutiepie gold member
    October 3, 2004
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    Thank you for you kind words, they are appreciated

  • Nicolette gold member
    October 3, 2004
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    Beauty within!

    I loved this poem - not just because I'm in a "helping" profession (social worker), but because I appreciate beauty and love and compassion and gentleness in all aspects of life - and yes, I echoe your thoughts, so beautifully presented in this poem, with everything in me! Indeed we that can see, can hear the birdsong, have children, whose souls are in love and have gentle hearts should reach out to those "less blessed" than us. Thank you for this little reminder and for sharing your compassion and the beauty within you!
    Nicolette

  • cutiepie gold member
    October 3, 2004
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    I am glad that you liked this poem Tina 's poem also struck a cord deep in me. It takes many kinds of poems to balance out our thoughts and dreams, so we have to take the despair and the love as a matter of course and as you say, it does balance each other out beautifully

  • cubert
    October 3, 2004
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    Oh beautiful. It brought me an incredible sense of balance, evening out the despair I felt from tina brannon's poem, Ruin. Thank you for the it of hope that saved the day. Sensational piece.

  • cutiepie gold member
    October 3, 2004
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    Thank you my friend, you are so good to read all my work and I do appreciate it very much,
  • Purplerose
    October 3, 2004
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    Great

    This is so sweet, you are totally right! I really enjoyed reading your newest piece, it is so beautiful, graceful, and poised. I loved your message and concept, brilliant job!
    Purplerose

  • cutiepie gold member
    October 3, 2004
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    Thank you This is not normally the way I write, and some of my stuff can be a little heavier, but now and again I need to change my pace, and this is how I do it, either this or "Whimseys" allows the brain to slow down a pace Many thanks for your kind words, they are appreciated

  • Mindless Insite
    October 3, 2004
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    Thanks for making such an upbeat poem, i usually dont enjoy them, but this one seemed more mysterious that it was upbeat... but at the same time it wasnt sad and depressing, its a good change of pace for me to read and everyone else for that matter... good job with the origional scheme and not comforming to a rhyme scheme, i like how it is rite ther perfectly... overall, great job with the poem, keep it up and ill be sure to keep reading them when i need a pick me up, lol

  • cutiepie gold member
    October 3, 2004
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    Thank you Elizabeth, I was not trying to be patronsing, Often in this world we are too busy to notice that others are struggling. A helping hand cost nothing and a smile even less Many thanks for your kind comments, they are appreciated

  • SilentScar
    October 3, 2004
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    A very touching and emotional peice. The refrain, which I usually detest, worked nicely in this form.

    Cheers,
    SilentScar
    ((Elizabeth))

  • cutiepie gold member
    October 3, 2004
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    Thank you
  • Deathdealer
    October 3, 2004
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    Hey, I really enjoyed reading this. It was indeed a nice little reminder about how as humans we can sometimes forget how to obtain compassion for one another.
    A beautiful write. Honest, open, and rather lovely.
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