Who can remember their race between dreams?
Nothing ever holds its pace between dreams.
A mighty river thunders on its way,
An endless quest for the place between dreams.
Though predators fiercely hunt for your soul,
Know they can never give chase between dreams.
Cloudscapes of splendor vanish in the wind;
Their existence bears no trace between dreams.
This depthless farness mid the burning stars
Is but the motionless space between dreams.
Light ventures through and beyond the abyss,
Yet will never show its face between dreams.
Our pains and sorrows gather fold on fold,
But who can carry their case between dreams?
Your freedom flutters far in flight, Zahhar,
For limitless is the grace between dreams.
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The Ghazal Page : www.ghazalpage.net/ (June 2002)
to learn more about the ghazal: allpoetry.com/Column/784848/all=1
Written April 4th, 2002
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This has been amazingly penned. I've never read a lot of english ghazals though I have heard a lot of 10. I did try one once but never completed it.
Your meter is perfect and the last line was really mind blowing. I always thought ghazals had 15 couplets. Thanks for correcting me.
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Ah, your poetry always seems to have a line which really captures me, and this piece is no different:
"Limitless is the grace between dreams" is nothing short of poetic magic. This poem is really vivd; I can even imagine the incorporeal space between two dreams as I read the repeating phrase. This is one of my favorites by you, I think. Really good job. I hope you don't mind, but if you have the time, mozy on over to my page and read my poem "Everything But Me", if only because I think you would like it. Walk in peace, bro. -
hm gotta try this one. I like repeat poetry. will have to add this to my list, and one day this year...
anyway, nicely written. -
"for limitless is grace between dreams"
thats just a gorgeous line.
dreams.....my dreams are so vivid, and real sometimes. I always remember them. They are almost like little mini movies, or replay of memories (though its strange, because in my dreams, its in 3rd person usually so I get to watch MYSELF in a memory...which is probably weird...but Im weird sometimes so I guess thats ok
heh ) and in dreams, I can still dance with my mother, barefoot on orange shag carpet, to that song.."Oh Ive seen fire and Ive seen rain..." but in the space between dreams...all I can do is wish to dream her again.
beautiful poetry. -
well, i gave it some thought. i agree that "depthless farness" is an unusual wording, but this unusual wording i think also captures the readers attention. i love the image of "depthess" (there being no way to measure the depth thereof) and "farness" (that incredible distance between stars) used together. there is a similar image used in one of Robert Service's poem, "The Spell of the Yukon", that i like. this is where the inspiration for this wording came from:
The summer -- no sweeter was ever;
The sunshiny woods all athrill;
The grayling aleap in the river,
The bighorn asleep on the hill.
The strong life that never knows harness;
The wilds where the caribou call;
The freshness, the freedom, the farness --
O God! how I'm stuck on it all.
it's in italics. the similarity is vague, but this line is exactly what inspired my use of "depthless farness". -
Well I like all of it except this line:
"This depthless farness mid the burning stars"
I like the image and hate the wording. I don't like lines that begin with the word 'This,' but that's another of my little absurdities. I want to read 'Depthless distance amidst the burning stars.' But it would probably screw up your meter. Anyway. Take another gander at this line and then change or defend it.
~Bezoar
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