Smokey sky, starless night
Desert land, barren mind
Sharp wind, stinging cold
Just once to feel the heat
Cyan sky, blazing sun
Dry land, broken dust
Still wind, molten heat
Just once to feel the rain
Author notes
Ok, I am pretty sure that means everything and hopefully you can understand the meaning. I won't say, I like to see what people get first from a poem. Interesting contest!
Written October 2nd, 2004
A contest entry
- Contest by .
400 points, ended October 13, 2004, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I'm thoroughly impressed. great write.
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gooood
OOOOh this is gooood.... -
Not a bad piece, for a shortie. It has its own little rhythm going on, which makes it fun to read aloud or hear read aloud, and that's pretty important to me as far as poetry goes. I was looking for something a little more mind-blowing for a contest winner, but this is still a good little gem of momentary imagery. Well done.
Much respect,
Sarah
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