I ask you,
"Who is your master?”
(No answer)
No one?
No mortal?
No god?
Dare to take the risk?
Burn in the blinding darkness,
Deal death upon Death himself.
Bathe in burning radiance.
Know the unknowable,
See the unseeable,
Touch the untouchable.
-I ask you again,
“Who is your master?”
(No answer.)
Defy the confines of the reality
Put upon you by the stagnant
and corrupt society.
-Do not let yourself be blinded
by their “truth”.
Who is your master?
(Still, no answer.)
You have all become slaves
To society’s reality.
Rise up,
Take charge.
(Keep the silence forever)
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Written October 2nd, 2004
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THIS was a great write...it was differnt from what i have read in a while..but it was awesome..you did a great job..and i loved it..keep on writing..
*-AmberLeigh-*
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wow, this poem was crazy. i do not even know how to comment on this one. this is such great style and .. my favorite part is Defy the confines of the reality
Put upon you by the stagnant
and corrupt society.
-Do not let yourself be blinded
by their “truth”.
Who is your master?
(Still, no answer.)
great write
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Well what to say??? THIS IS GR8! I love the way u write, the style n vocabulary, n the way u defy that guy to answer u. Its like arrogance with grace. CLAP CLAP CLAP
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WOW this is beautiful. It is very well writen. it was awsome. keep up the great work. hope to read some more of ur writing!
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Beautiful and very free. I like the whole dark feeling of this. Very well written. Keep it up.
-Ashley,
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Oh daughter of mine, this write is so telling of all who live in this world, I do feel that someday we will in the end be the ones who kill ourselves. I absolutely saw nothing wrong with this write. Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful. Makes me open my eyes and take a good look around, it makes me question what I thought was true. Awesome!!!
Much love,
~C.J.~
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This was really good. Keep up the good work and keep the poems coming in. Take care now.
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This is such an interesting way to compose a poem. You are very talented. It's like your daring us to look at the facts instead of listening to them. I agree my dear. Well written. Oh and the background and pictre are just great.
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Hmmm, This is a nice write, It was a little hard to read though, with the colors you have with this background. Keep the poems coming. May the Lord always be with you...
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Very strong poem great wording and I love the background it was just a perfect setting for this poem sometimes poems can't be amazing without a great setting and you did a good job making one for this wonderful piece
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Its not often im rendered COMPLETELY SPEECHLESS (being as I am a CB addict and by default crazy chattery) BUT oh my goddess, honey, this is awesome.
And I suually find that the pictures ppl post with their poems take away from the words, but in this case you chose wisely.
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you compliment my work but yours deserves so much more praise than my own and everyone seems to say it better than i but i think i will stick around for more pleasant reading. thank you for sharing and keep up the good work! ~Lf
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excellent write
this is excellent and goes to show you.. freedom of choice isn't what it is ment to be..great write
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This is a terrific
piece of writing.
so beautifully done.
keep up the good work
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wowy...loved it!!
wow....what a perfectly awesome write...its so good...
very well written...
Great job..
Keep it up..
Heather -
great
wow that's an awesome write. you have an amazing love for writing and such a great way of expressing ur ideas and ur feelings...i wish more ppl could and would write like you..but none the less that was a very powerful writing and incredably amazing! -
That was a nice write! Very dark and deep, and I liked it! Keep it up!
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Its amazing what we do to please or for the sake of society... we're in a rat race... well written... I also liked the background you've chosen for this piece...
mina -
Excellent
whats the cliche?..."DARE TO BE DIFFERENT" thats fits perfectly here, and though it is a cliche it holds a ring of truth that can not be denied. And i love "Who's your Master?" line...its definitely not society in my case...i really like this...great background and image. -
hmm...nice write ..one question tho...does the fact that i know i am being controlled by the society make me any better than the rest of us..who r just blindfolded follwoing everything that is laid on their platter coz they r told that there is nothin besides that there is to be....or do i also follow in the same class as them..does my awareness of the fact that i am being controlled give me any choice with respect to the fact that tomorrow i can renounce the control or keep it if i want to....
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Wow...it's so wonderfully written and it has a strong impact on the readers believe me.You are right we are all slaves to the society....we believe that the society is always right and we always think twice before doing anything bcoz we fear what the society may think.The lines I especially like are "Know the unknowable,
See the unseeable,
Touch the untouchable.
-I ask you again,
“Who is your master?”
(No answer.)
Defy the confines of the reality
Put upon you by the stagnant
And corrupt society.
-Do not let yourself be blinded
By their “truth”."
all the very best...
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I've read through most of your writings and I like them. You have a variety of different styles I enjoyed reading.
It's so funny to see some one writing about pop culture and how it's rounding people up in this ideal, and people are following along like cattle. That whole issue weighs on me a lot. I wish people would just see. -
nailed it
I have a simple philosophy/religion I live life by.
"I don't believe in anyone/anything that don't believe in me."
Duality permeates ALL of life, so there must be a give
and take on ALL levels and between ALL things...hmmm
Hugs...Eddy
Nice to see another truth-slinger here...
Maybe if we stack the walls of truth high enough, they will
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Ive been looking through your work. I love your work, I love the words you choose. But most the time it seems like i cant really understand wehre you're commin from.
I wish i could write like you, everybody that reads my work knows whats goin on, and sometimes with who... it sux
Great Writes
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excellent
this was a great poem.. has alot of "power" in your words..imagery was great and had a great message.. ~iccara~(mom)
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pass!
i like the repetitive nature of it... gives a bit of a sinking feeling attached to that knowledge of giving in...
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Cool, the words you used fit perfecty. Good job
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