This is the moment I have waited for
I feel my heart beating
As you walk down the stairs
Your smile lights up the room
What was once a crowded room, now seems empty
Your eyes sparkle with such joy
Your beauty captivates me and embraces me in such a special way
As you walk towards me I feel a field of butterflies deep within
You slowly reach your hand out to me
I find myself speechless
You smile as you whisper my name
As you take my hand in yours
A magical feeling overtakes me
We walk together into another room
Candle light dances around
Your eyes sparkle with such beauty
In the softness of the candlelight your cheeks glow
We slowly turn towards each other
And our lips touch
My hand touches your tender cheek
And my other slowly wraps around your waist
Slowly we lie upon a soft fur rug
We are carried away to a special place
Together we find ourselves in paradise
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Written September 25th, 2004
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Beauty in itself. That is what i see in this piece. Sounds like you write this for the same person in the other i read not long ago. Your words are pure magic. They shower the reader with images so peaceful and loving. You have penned a piece here that really is a treasure. From the very start to the very finish, i was captivated by the words and how they just joined together in harmony. Marvelous!
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I learn so much from you, Passionate Knight.
Candle light dances around
Your eyes sparkle with such beauty
In the softness of the candlelight your cheeks glow
We slowly turn towards each other
And our lips touch
My hand touches your tender cheek
And my other slowly wraps around your waist
Slowly we lie upon a soft fur rug
We are carried away to a special place
Together we find ourselves in paradise
Your work never ceases to inspire me when it comes to writing in this genre.
Knight70
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Another heart melting write... Beautifully written and so well expressed... An all consuming love and desire...The images so vividly described I can see it...This is sensually romantic filled with passion... You have a wonderful way with word and expressing yourself. Well done.
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I have always enjoyed paradise. I like how you can express your inner emotions of the one who gives you butterflies. A very nice to read poem.
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OH WOW!!Sweet Sensual, Romantic...I can actually visualize the scene..her coming down the stairs to meet her love,nerves fluttering about, as you get lost in moments pleasure..your own paradise..wow wow wow...i loved this one. *sigh* tohave that one moment, i would give anything to edure.Thanks for making my night.
~~Tory~~
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Really feel the love and warmth
with this one . Love it I can picture
the whole thing Beautiful write -
Very beautiful read your descriptions of the sight of the person you love are magical and inspire much awe. This is a nice write. Thanks for sharing.
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This is a very good write, just a tip about the double use of the word 'room' so close together in the 14th and 15th lines, it slightly takes away from the poem. Try leaving out the word room altogether in the 15th line since we already know you are in a room. 'Candlelight dances around, your eyes sparkle with such beauty.'
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love it
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Ed, this is beautiful, your words have so much feelings and come from your heart, this is how I feel about my love, hopefully he'll come back to me, as I love him so much and I know he loves me~Jenn
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beautifull, a piece of art it truely is! keep up the good work love ya chelle
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just from my heart to yours!
I read this poem many times now and everytime is just makes me feel how love is sweet and it's so amazing how you described your love to..and the background you choose with the butterflies its so cute..that's how you feel though when you are carried away to that special place.
..good job..shower me and other readers..with your romantic way of putting the words together..love to you always..
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Bravo!!!
Another Beauty, Sir!!! Very consistent writes, my Friend...{sigh} & I DO so love my flutterbyes...keep writing, Poet!!! Wanda
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great
Rock on!!!
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