Hollow, the echo in it's chant,
of melodious insistence, to
have the final word, in the
discussion, of vibration around
the cliffs of quartz and lime;
Discarded, shells of winkle and
oyster underfoot, as the green
sliminess of seaweed is harvested,
to produce "dulsk" with its healing
and iodine;
peppered, pebbles from eons ago;
Discarded by the waves that touch
each shore, in time with the white
moustaches frothed brimming
brine.
Glass fragments, as pearls, glisten
under the watchful eyes of sea
monsters, as they play; Just out of reach,
of reel and rod and stories grow
of the "One who got away".
Ripples, recede, as tides change;
Swift chills, chase away the shadows
of late sun ; Dry, crunch under foot
as the call of hunger, bids us home,
from this ever changing portrait...........
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Written October 1st, 2004
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Thank you
I am pleased that you enjoyed this poem 
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Oh I love this. Such a beautiful vivid visual your imagery has built up here, the lovely photograph is almost unnecessary. The vocabulary's very varied, and it's wonderful how you describe things. Bookmarked, very well written.
Lynn xXx
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Thanks Sunrise
Glad you liked it
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WOW! enjoyed the unusual rhyme sceme,gives it echo-good job! i surely escaped to a serene beach scene with this poem, somewhere i always miss and always freely run to and always love to be at you've done it again, cutiepie !Outstanding work of art!inspiring poem!keep it up!
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Lol , well yes To me the echo has a hollow ring as it's chant dies away leaving a void, perhaps I should have used a different word? Glad you are de-stressed a bit now
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Thank you my friend , I am glad you enjoyed this stroll along the beach
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Thank you Danna, I am glad you enjoyed this poem
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Thank you so much for your beautiful words, I am glad you could gain some enjoyement from this poem, the wonderful thing about nature is that it lends it'self to an artists whim, to be able to paint a picture in words is wonderful and I am delighted that you enjoyed this poem
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Ooh, as I read I relax. Thank you for de-stressing me. One question, should the first line read "Hollow, the echo in its chant"?
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Thank you I am glad you enjoyed this poem
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Oh my Ms Cutie..., If you ask me I would say you have become worthy of being labeled a peot and read every day. --- This is a really soothing read - lovely images - beautiful (congratulations) and thank you.
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Beautifully descriptive!
Ahh, I love these type of poems. They're so serene to me...practically comforting. I, myself, have never had the pleasure of seeing the sea.
I think that's why I love these poems so much...that, and because it seems as though ocean-oriented poems are the most descriptive. Actually nature poems seem to be more descriptive as a whole...and your poem here was no exception to that. 
You used a really awesome assortment of words, and some great metaphors...it really was beautiful, and it seemed very sophisticated to me. I enjoyed reading it...congrats on it!
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What a lovely and inspirational write. I love the sense of peacefullness that I got as I read. Nice sense of movement within the imagery too.
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good job , excellent use of vocabulary.
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Thank you Katy, no not a brilliant writer, am still learning but I am so pleased that you enjoyed this poem, nature is one of my favourites
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Thank you It is nice to hear that the poems are getting better
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This was absolutley brilliant... I am speechless... Your writing was absolutely beautiful, and your discriptions were some of the best I've ever read.
You are obviously a very talented writer. Keep up the absolutely fantastic work!
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really good Cutie shows a lot of growth in your writing an excellent piece
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Glad you liked it Timothy ( Have a son with the same name ) Yes I have what is known as a vivid imagination sometimes it works to my advantage, sometimes not Many thanks for your kind comments, they are appreciated
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Thank you I love the beach especially on a wild day the frenzy of the waves hypnoise me, its beautiful Many thanks and peace also
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Sorry I couldnt keep your attention but I shall have to try harder next time Glad you liked the background
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Very captivating read, you have a way with throwing that imagery around like no one's buisness! Thanks for sharing, great work!
-Timothy
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That was awesome! I was raised on the beach (im from daytona beach FL) and the ocean has to be the most inspiring element. I love your writing style. peace.
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I don't usually read nature poems, but this one is good. I like your choice of background. I must say, it didn't really keep my attention. But thats just me. Cheers! -
Thank you Lol made me smile, I also have problems learning how all things work here Never mind, I will work things out in the end . I am glad you liked this, it was supposed to be like taking a stroll along the beach
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I am glad you enjoyed this poem,I borrowed the picture from somewhere
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Ooooh i love the imaginery here. I like the picture you have used too, it reminds me somewhere abroad, i wanna go on holiday now lol! anyway my stupid comments aside, this was a great write! well done!
take care x
~*~ Gemz ~*~
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