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Through Hell's Fire




Demons be real,
    Demons be damned.
Hell rejects its stillborn.

With thorns they come;
Blades sharpened and ready
to cut the sweet meat.

Dead but alive,
  -They look on
at the awaiting souls
wanting a bargain.

Their stench smells
of the foulest
of hell-spawn.

Through the devil's minion-
They are born.

Through Hell's fire-
They are
Christianed.

But through our sins,
They find peace.

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Written October 1st, 2004

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  • noel lovett
    July 9, 2005
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    awesome work

    I admire your skill...nice writing and keep up the good work ish.


  • imagesofagirl
    May 23, 2005
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    i like the descriptive parts at the beginning, but I feel the whole thing got a bit convuluted and the ending just didn't work for me.
    mel.


  • ish174
    January 25, 2005
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    Thank you for your outstanding review. There are not many that can look into this peice the way you have, and I can see by the name you have chosen for youself that you know exactly what I am talking about. "Torn Chakra", absolutely brilliant I must say, and so true, in so many ways. Thank you, thank you! Keep in touch!

    Ish

  • Mrs. Dumas silver member
    January 25, 2005
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    Loved it! I loved the imagery and flow to this. And I would like to take this opportunity to answer puzzledone121's question: can dark souls really find peace? I say yes because everyone finds peace in a different way or thing. I find my peace in the dark, and in blood...but that's just me....Anyways, great job!

    Jess


  • puzzledone121
    January 17, 2005
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    my question is, can dark souls really find peace...that was a really graphic picture painted in words, very well written/expressed...you have a nice way to describing..but i have difficulty understanding dark.. enjoyed reading...


  • grand theft autumn
    November 19, 2004
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    hey this is your adoptee... lol my name is autumn. I think your poems are great especially this one- I like to read and write dark stuff you can prolly figure that out. I can't wait to see the picture, lol


  • Soul-2-Soul
    October 10, 2004
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    i agree with what u said....waiting for that picture...


  • Lady Bird
    October 9, 2004
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    Very vivid imagery...dark and bitter, like you said, but still very good...very, very good. I enjoyed this a lot...the flow is great and this was fantastic.

    -Lander

  • shadowchild25
    October 6, 2004
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    wow, an amazing write. all vivid imagery and great word choice. you used great words with conotations to die for, wow.
    wow. this is awesome. I hope you enjoyed writing it. it is most definitely a great work.


  • star-filled-sky
    October 6, 2004
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    Wow. That was dark but very good. I couldn't get much emotion out of it but it was very well written.


  • AutoPilate
    October 1, 2004
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    Dripping!

    Vivid, and the flow is fantastic! I could almost hear the demons sharpening their weapons, see them practically drooling with the anticipation of piercing sweet flesh. Then the twist as it concluded, deliciously bitter irony. Great work!

    Thanks for sharing!

    - Giovanni

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