Things always seem to go wrong
And I always suffer long,
When things go good they should prolong
And I will soon after become strong.
I should try with all my might
To follow God and His light,
Place Heaven in my sight
And don't let Satan give me a fright.
Over Satan I have soared
Using the Bible as my sword,
And though church sometimes may be a bore
I have still rightfully served the Lord.
I live each day that God has gave
And for others a way I pave,
Here on earth I did behave
And will die happy in my grave.
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Written October 1st, 2003
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It seems
That in todays world there is a constant battle between good and evil. Between religious and those secular. and the battle we must win is the one for our soul I feel. Nicely penned -
Faith
In the service of ones God faith perhaps is the most important of all virtues. Write on young poet
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your rhyme was perfect this was a wonderful message
i liked this poem as a whole i would not change any parts of this beautiful poem
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usually when i rhyme i loose the imagery, but you defiantly did not,
this is a really good poem,
i also loves the topic of this poem,
its really thoughtfull, and deep,
thankyou for sharing
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You have a good imagination and you're very good at making people see what you're thinking... which is a very good thing.
I liked also that this had very nice flow and you worded it very well.
My favorite verse:
Things always seem to go wrong
And I always suffer long,
When things go good they should prolong
And I will soon after become strong.
Yeah. You will end up strong in the end, no doubt about that!
Keep up the damn good work! -
good rhyme and rhythm and great topic too, thank you for sharing and keep up the good work
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