I’m scarred for all eternity
A wound of deceit, a wound of immorality
A scar not of flesh, one not of bone,
A wound that hurts the inner tunnels of humanity
I’ve been battered around, I’ve been tossed and turned,
I’ve been bound to the selfish bolds of love
And still hate I have not conceived
The everlasting joy of love I once knew,
Gone away, as angered memories anew
Refreshed of the deed done to me,
The deceit of willful lies and of pride brandished
And burned away by an evil voluptuous temptress of despair
I was told of this temptress long before.
I was to ward off against this deadly foe that
Rips out the heart and feeds it to its vultures.
I was warned against the evil of the mind and the evil of the heart.
But I was swayed by the heart, as I was unwisened
About the evils of such an enigma
So now I live, soulless, heartless, pitiless, feeding off
The leftovers of a brandished society of pain
I remember naught, but one thing.
I remember love, so long ago, that I gave but did not receive.
Instead, an eternal scar was left, for she loved not me, but another.
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A must read. Trust me!
Written September 30th, 2004
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One sided hurts the most because you would do whatever humanly possible for someone and they just don't get it on their end.
The every heartache, heartbreak, and heart throbb we all learn something different and is given a new shed of light upon something unknown. Yes some of which we'd all rather not discover, but "sometimes one must endure the bad in order to live to see the good."
Well done!
Take care of yourself, those you love and learn to love.
~Night
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this was so deep it was packed with image
it was full of emotion
your words made one fill your pain and all know about the scar that love leaves
this was a great poem
i liked it as a whole no parts better than another i liked you title alot it caught my eye
great work
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you, you are really tallented,
when i read this it filled my heart with emotion,
this is amazing,
thanks for sharing
xoxoxoxox
april
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thi is so kewl i rly wish i cud right lyke u. wut does brandished men? lol i had to uze the dixunary alott tow red ur poem. butt i cuont fine the other worx u uzed. this iz rly awzome.
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Great
heylo
i really enjoyed this great piece of poetry ^_^
the flow of the poem was great
lots of emotion in the poem which is great.. i really liked this part ...
I was told of this temptress long before.
I was to ward off against this deadly foe that
Rips out the heart and feeds it to its vultures.
i don't no why, but this part of the poem stood out to me the most, but overall its a thoroughly great piece of work
Keep up good work and keep great poems coming
~~ Veo ~~
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Well, I wouldn't know if this is a "must read" but it had its moments and emotional turmoil that most times draws me to certain pieces.
I felt, however, that you had too many 'little words' in certain lines, it expanded each section in an added sort of way that it didn't really seem to require or even need it. I feel some of the 'the, I, is, to,' etc., could be removed without losing the passion of the piece.
I think it could use an edit or two but it's a good piece, much emotion.
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Revealing!
I understand more than you realize here. Bless your heart! Be strong! All will come to us in due time, especially when we're not "watching." I love this poem! It's both beautiful and revealing, and I know in my heart you needed to get it said, get it out. Just know that you're not alone, okay? Much love to you and yours!--Kel
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This piece is heart-felt. I feel that you are good at writing and expressing your true feeling in poetry.
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Oh my. This ...is...wow. I really have no other words. Beautiful might suit though. thanks for writing this.....masterpiece. Keep writing!I love the imagry!
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wow!!! that's really all i can say at this point! the words you used just fit so perfectly!!! wow this was an excellent poem! Nice job with this!!! you had tons of emotion in it and well it was really good!!! kudos!
could you please return the favor?!?
I am in a contest where the applause counts. meaning whoever gets the most wins... i would really like to get my first trophy... please here is the link: allpoetry.com/Poem/1734216
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Loved the structure and flow! Very well written, I loved the imagery and your words were so true! Excellent work here, defiantly worthy of appluase.
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Very saddening, and I understand the painful sentiments behind this piece. I hate that you ever had to experience a one-sided love, but I guess heartbreak is destined to happen to the best of us. It can be very difficult to remember the good about love when one is wrapped up in bitterness. Trust me, I know too well--I am an expert on heartbreak. I wish that I could pick up the shattered pieces of your heart and put them back together, or do anything that may help. Unfortunately, recovering from a loss so devastating as that is never easy, so... we just have to take it one day at a time, and remember that every breath grows less painful.
May this year bring you someone who will return your affections tenfold.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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I am glad you like this one. It is one of my favorites. Unlike God's Inspiration, my other poem you commented on, this one was actually how I felt, where as God's Inspiration is me more in love, with love.
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I'll be looking to read more from you.This was good.lol,not to laugh but I can't help it...it strikes a nerve in me.I can relate and I defunitly get the point.
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ouch...a poem soaked with hurt and sadness. great expression.
"A wound that hurts the inner tunnels of humanity"
loved this line... i took it not only as hurt of one person but also a perfect description of a society in turmoil.
i am getting too deep for myself
truly a good poem...
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pretty good - a sad write - love unrequited - an old story - part of the mystery of loves fortunes -
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nicely done,
like the ending,
the whole thing
flows smooth,
poignant write
and the feeling comes through.
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A very goos write...it is very touching as well.
Its too bad that the girl you love didn't reciprocate your feelings....maybe she isnt the one that is meant for you.
You will find your true love in someone else ....
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I love the ending - totally heart wrenching - Anyone who has ever been there can recall that pain to the day they die. Poor you.
Must look up some of your other works.
Diz
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This is creative and it's a great write. i love the words youve chosen to convey your innermost pain... its such a great write.
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Excellent
Sad, but very well written. I loved the choice of words you used. Amazing poem. I hope that all will see that this poem had to have some emotionally bearing, seeing how it was written. This is a really great write.
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