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Cause, I hate you

I hate you so much
I壇 kill you with one touch
make you bleed from the end side
make you feel what I feel
make I so real
my love for you had died
I wanted to make you burn and make you learn
all the pain you put me through
with this knife
I値l kill your life
man, I hate you
I値l drown you in a lake
cause, you called me a fake
but, you liked the band Hanson
burn and slice
stab and dice
I値l kill you like Charles Manson
I値l through your heart in a basket
though you in a casket
fuck it, I知 through
bleeding rage
I値l through you in a cage
cause, I hate you

Author notes

burn and slice
stab and dice
I値l kill you like Charles Manson
Written September 30th, 2004

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  • thelovesongwriter
    May 31, 2007
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    alot of rage, but not enough imagery! but great job! good luck