Crying, tears of blood;
Awash the rivers of pain;
Seeps deep, beneath the exterior walls of survival;
Torturous, phantoms
rip the nights sky, with
their blood lust fast on their heels ;
Fat executioner,
watches on with glee, at an ever growing swing
of fear and bloodletting;
As the population diminishes,
rapidly into dust........
Author notes
I was touched by a Haiku of Haikumonk........
Written September 29th, 2004
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Thats ok Honeybug
we each have a liking for a certain type of poem or story. I am not offended by the fact that this poem didnt reach you and in a way I am glad it didnt, there is too much pain and suffering without me inflicting any more.... Many thanks for your comments 
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excellent
Such a person that exists in reality, like some we all have heard of in Iraq and Afghanista, are indeed fat executioners.
Well spoken here cutiepie!
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ok here goes,i will tell you the truth from my point of the poem.i dont really get it i even went back to read it twice.im not trying to say its a bad poem,i just dont get that all.
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Thank you and yes, I had missed the misspelling Many thanks for noting it and I do appreciate any corrections
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Thank you, what saddens me is the depth of emotions that this subject triggers off in me
I am glad you enjoyed this poem, Many thanks for your comments, they are greatly appreciated
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like anasuya says..yikes ( in a good way) and it really has a dreadful vibe one nitpicky i have to say you spelled 'executioner' no biggie..but advise is always helpful to help you catch the little things u overlooked. keep writing
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Yikes... this has quite an impact, visually speaking. And I say "yikes" in a good way of course. I love poetry that just slams into you and keeps pummeling away with words, and that's what this one did. Very sad ending, but honest... and left open for the reader to decide where things should go from there, or if they go anywhere at all. Lovely.
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