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Come inside the tent
I have some friends you should meet
Come inside the tent
You know we saved you a seat
Don't be afraid, this shouldn't hurt a bit
You've come so far, you don't want to quit.
Welcome to our tent
We hope you find a warm chair
Welcome to our tent
You know our odds are quite fair
Don't be shocked to see her bound, and tied
You've sacrificed, an' just flat-out lied.
You could blame the tent
If that helps you find sleep
You could blame the tent
And the evil it keeps
Don't lose faith, it's all that you have left
You've guessed right, the gypsy way is theft.
Never leave the tent
Just relax and let go
Never leave the tent
Breathe the poppy halo
Don't look now, the blood has just arrived
You've had your fill, now can you survive.
buy the cd today,
and get a free asshat
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Author notes
This song can be heard for free here
gangbox.com/mp3/gypsyrogue.mp3
But I would appreciate some of my peers
contributing to the good fight, by
purchasing my records at
www.cdbaby.com/horus8
Sexy murder
Written September 29th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- TwistEd Poets...Come out come out... by Twisteddolly.
320 points, ended November 22, 2004, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is an awesome write. The music goes very well with the piece. Keep up the killer work and take care!!!!
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This is a pretty wild little number, can't listen to the music, but I like the repetition in your verses, the tent image "holds the evil" in the piece, for an oppressive creepy feel, magnetic and scarey, just what the contest asked for. Best of luck.
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I have never heard anything like this...it doesn't really make all that sense to me but I do like the theme and the subject of gypsies
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it's a song, no opinions are necessary. Songs are similiar to photographs in that one needs to understand that it's a frozen moment in time that changes in time with the observer. Songs are meant to be listened to not read, they lose their extra dimensions if viewed in that light, that's where the translation gets lost. People always expect something when they read my work, and expectations are a great way to stagnate.
the only thing I ever force in life, are these lame replies to the same boring people. -
Very thought out poem you have here. It's really cool how you got a title like this one. I like the idea and picture as well too. What really cool though is the rythm to it all.
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funnily, one of my nicknames is gypsy, not really sure why...
it was a great one to read, although because my pc is so s...l...o...w... i couldn't listen to the song. the lyrics read really well! smashing stuff!
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Woot woot!!
Wow, that is really good.
If I may be so bold as to ask, what is the tent and what is it supposed to represent? Why is the person tied-why are they about to kill her?----is it because of that one person's actions are slowing killing that of one they love?
Awsome poem.
~Yellow Sharpie -
interesting write!
thanks for sharing-
Krystal
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Hey this is interesting, but I am called a Gypsy and I do not steal. so all gypsys are theives. so I found that offensive, but I guess songs and poems will be and go free. Your thoughts are yours and mine are mine, never will they intertwine. but I hope your song gets a lot of people liking it and I wish you the best of luck. laters
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good piece
This was an interesting piece, It wasn't bad lyrics, and it wasn't a bad poem, I didn't really approve of the repetition, it felt dry, and I felt I was reading the same thing over and over, this went VERY well with the mp3, I would say it served it's purpose lyrically, I thought the writing was a smidge dry, but i'm picky, overall it was good.
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Always felt I had a gypsy soul, you know? Don't like to stay in one place too long.
I really like the tone. So inviting, and then it becomes, well, almost frightning. Very cool!
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I liked it.....It was very well written and the song gos wit it..... Keep up the great work!!!
~Pandora -
Wow, this is crazy, i didnt get to listen to it in song.."shitty computer" but i wish i could have my lyrics put to music...anywayz great job always keep writing
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FREAKY!! COOL POEM THOUGH.
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this is one of the songs i heard from your site, i really liked it in a strange creepy way.
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Sounds more like a den than a tent... ahhhhhh a den of inequity even. I assure you... there is no-thing wrong with the gypsy way.
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Poppy halo = smoking opium.
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This is an, interesting poem, yes it did start out very happy, light hearted and seemed like it was gonna be a nice poem, but during it there were hints of insanity and by the end it was indeed rather twisted and insane. I like the way you wrote it, it definitely had a good rhythm and was a well structured poem for what you were trying to get across. I'm not sure i quite got what breathing the 'poppy halo' is, but still, probably something i just don't know about because im an uncultured swine
, even so, great write, i liked, well done
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Spoolged like hayzeus
You hear the song? I was whipping dem chinks like me cavi(e)r. -
Don't feel bad, I couldn't afford it.
They do, but you must be dead first. -
MAN, you know i would love to buy the book and cds
same old story. broke/ how come rich people dont like poetry? -
excellent
I really like it! Starts out so light-hearted, and ends prtty twisted. You managed to stop it going over the top though, which I imagine a lot of people couldn't do. Nice work
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