I, am of the mighty ocean,
in it's hurry to drag you under;
Reaching, from beneath the caverns
below; Soft, filled with sand and creatures
unaware of your existence; Having enticed
you here to my water world, I intend for you
to remain, amongst my sisters; We have hunted
for the long ships, for thousands of years in our quest;
Many escaped, but not you; You, shall remain with us;
And, we shall teach you the call of the dolphin, and the cry
of the whale;
As you, remain here and develop your tail.......
Author notes
www.robbo24.freeserve.co.uk/clip1.htm kindly lent me the photo 
Written September 28th, 2004
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I will certainly read you ocean poems Many thanks for reading so many of my poems
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Cool Cool! I liked the suspense at the end with the ... and all! Thats what I love about your poetry you can just see an image, and I like those kind of poems, if you'd like you can read my poem Ocean Sunset or the Ocean's Sunset...p.s. they are two WAY different poems, hehe well but they both have to do with the ocean hehe! rEADING oN...
Jessica -
Thank you so much for your lovely words, they are greatly appreciated
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Thank you It brought out the child in me
Glad you liked it
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Beautiful...
Wow...i really liked this one! OH, and you used Ariel's pic. I love fantasy, and this was a good poem. I really enjoyed it. I just got done reading a book about a mermaid... (it's called Sirena, by Donna Jo Napoli...if you were wondering.) and i thought it was great to come to your page and read this! I also wanted to thank you for writing me. And no thank you to promoting any of my poems. I don't really want to. Thanks for the mention though. Well, gotta go... take care!
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ooooooooooooo mermaids, i like mermaids. =)
hm, develop my tail, lol,
very good line, great thinking on that one.
ananother bootiful write by cutiepie
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Thank you I am delighted that you enjoyed this dip into the deep blue yonder... Many thanks for your very kind comments
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A REALLY COOL POEM
Such a wonderful poem. I love poems of mermaids and the sea. Such a pleasure to read. Take care, Sandy -
Glad you enjoyed it many thanks for your kind comments
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Thanks I had fun writing it and finding graphics for it, that google thinggy is great! Glad you enjoyed
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Thank you Margaret , lol you have a wicked sense of humour
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great job.......the flow was well done and it was overall just a very great piece.....great job and keep on writing
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I love this piece. Every line was great. Exquisite and simple. I like that. Very great job. Ariel (or however she spells her name) was a great picture for this piece. I loved it. Keep up the good work.
Much love,
Kristen
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Fun
"What, you can't breathe down here? Oops."
Cute story, I had fun with it.
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Thanks William, but I cant take the credit for the art work the link is below Glad you enjoyed it
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Glad you enjoyed it Many thanks
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excellent
Well written ,Certainly a good tale.,,even a whale of a tale.
Poem that reminds one of fairy stories as a child., Graphic was really good . thank you a nice poem to read -
Glad you liked this poem I thought it went well with the picture Many thanks for your kind thought
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I loved this!!!! Such a cute picture to go with the write... the structure of this write was unique to me, well done, don't know what else to say! 
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