You stand there so smugly
anger simmers in my veins
it begins to boil over
you have used me once again
If only you could see
look past this smiley face facade
hidden down inside, the emotion sheer rage
it lingers and it hungers to feed...
In the blink of an eye sudden death
so many ways to destroy what we love
each thought a premeditation
an innocent we become no longer to murder
A knife in your heart
wildly I'll twist the blade
blood pouring forth like a river
my chalice filled provides still no relief
I look into those death glazed eyes
they mirror the other culprit's face
a blade to remove them quickly
blue snake eyes continue mocking me
I bend to kiss your chilling lips
the smell of honey nectar stops my descent
a quick slash to those thin strips
artistic sadistic flaw her honey scent still lingers
Continue to stand there
oblivious to a rage you'll never know
my sensibility over-rides my temporary mental instability
I with resolved self reverence turn around
as I walk out the door I smile smugly
"Relax baby, there's always tomorrow!"
(c)2004
~Nikki~
Author notes
I have no idea where this one came from so please don't ask! This is actually a spur of the moment one that just screamed wildly for me to type it out! Geez, I think I've scared myself here!
LOL
Written September 28th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Give it to me Dark by Boe.
300 points, ended December 11, 2004, 9 entries
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Difficulty and complexity in relationships with other people comes as no surprise, because love itself is a very difficult and complex thing to begin with and that is just the emotion by itself, when it gets taken into a situation that involves other people, that brings even more complex structure to the already vertical wall of the human mind.
But that is the joy of falling in love, there is something entirely scientific about the logic of it all, how we are chemically destined to be attracted to someone for some reason that nature has chosen for us, but then again there is also a spiritual glow to its existence. Natural selectivity is thoughtful and all, but what about loving someone for more intellectual reasons alongside the physical. How does science explain that? They can't, because love is a mystery even to those of us who feel it, it is something magical that happens and there is no one answer to what it is or what it can be.
It is an indescribable emotion that can be expressed in many different forms but never truly expressed because there is no true way to express it. Each way is true, there is no one direction is is to be directed in. It is all in the mind of the people involved, how they choose to describe it and attach it to their own definition of what they think there relationship to those they are in a relationship under the word love.
A very well done piece, with just the right amount of undertoned aggression and sarcasm thrown in with poetic intent.
Masterful and articulate.
much love,
James
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Great job. This poem is very dark and depressing. I really liked this. Thanks for sharing. Keep up the great work and best of luck to you in the contest! Take care.
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Oh, I think you must be writing about my sister-in-law, you described her perfectly, in her ability to gain your trust so that she can turn around and stab you in the back. You expressed your rage so well. I don't think that anything hurts more than being turned on by someone you trusted completely.
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You really touch on alot of subjects here- I commend you for that.
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Ooooh...gurl...what you been smoking?? This was downright chilling, the descriptions just oozing like a puss-filled wound forever slashed and open...lol. So needless to say, I LOVED it!
So yeah, fun fun for the whole family, eh? lol Remind me never to piss YOU off, gurlina.
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LOL...Thanks Doc!
Trust me only my exhusband could piss me off enough for this one which is actually who I was thinking of when this one ripped right out of me!
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WOW!Nikki!!!This is great,dark,spooky,and angry!But it supposed to be that way right?The form is excellent,flows smooth.Just a really good job......oh and remind me NEVER to tick you off!!
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Thanks Diamond! I thought I had stopped by your bio page and read a piece or two or three of yours...Hmmm guess I did not...DRAT! It is something I always try to do when I enter a contest...
1. Comment on some of the other entries
2. Comment on some of the contest holders pieces
I guess I fell lax here! Bad Me! Grrrr but I shall be visiting you now!
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WOW awesome poem. SO much hatred. I have felt this way about a few men in my life... which if you have read any of my stuff you would understand way... anyways your flow is awesome and this is wonderfully written. Thanks for sharing and keep writting
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Hee, hee, that last line was some comic relief to the boiling rage! This reminded me of that wife who was cheated on and ran over her husband like 12 times! Like these thoughts might have been hers before she took action. Yes, this poem reeks of emotion, I wanted you to do that guy harm and I would have smugly smiled right along with you!
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This was well written and it truly does show a lot of emotion...I think the raw human emotions are always the best when it comes to writing and you have done a great job of demonstrating how raw those emotions can get...Good luck in the contest!
Victoria Lin -
that is really beautiful...
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wow...talk about watching one's back...I'd be scared of you if your vengeance was directed towards me...great job depicting every depth of all the imagery provided...it made such an enjoyable haunting read, where I was truly entertained!
Mozaic -
wow way to go...great imagery...even if u dont know where it came from..its awesome...great job...u can feel the emotion if anyone has ever used you or ripped out ur heart...great job!
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The flow was amazing. Great job on the amazing imagery in this piece. It flowed very very smoothly. Keep up the good work. I look forward to doing more.
Much love,
Kristen
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Great job! keep it up
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Strong imagery
I hesitated to read this one, and the red text with skulls background did not allay my trepidation. Then the poem itself! with strong defined images of violence and seething emotion, well, I'm glad for your author note that puts my fears to rest.
It sounds like you channelled a ghost. Blessings and best wishes for peace in your life!!
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Nikki, I loved the poem and the way you concluded it... "there's always tomorrow"... and tomorrow brings a new hope... one door closes and another opens... very well written...
mina
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I like this, its written well and I can relate. Read my poem Dried Depression or Soft-Footed Homicide, they're along the same topic. good write.
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wow! That rocks out! I really like the way you wrote this, its awesome! Especially to just be spur of the moment!
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you did a wonderful job with imagery, and it flowed so wonderfuly,
great job! it reminds me of minority report... heh...
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