From aphotic mists I slowly emerge,
Awakened by night's shrill nocturne;
Coruscating eyes now seek to purge
Hellions within that writhe and burn
I glide on the currents of your mind,
Permeating a realm veiled by dreams;
With me, darkness has intertwined
Yet not in the manner which it seems
Caliginous brilliance emanates free
To dispel each entrenching nightmare
Disquieting your somnolent dormancy,
Leaving the spirit in sudden disrepair
Any evil being daring to tread this path
Will meet certain defeat at my hand,
For all demons fear a minacious wrath
And search for escape by my command
Never fear me, this angel of the dark
As I come not to bring you any fright;
I am but an avenger that must embark
On quests to quell the villains of night.
Author notes
thought I'd mingle the dark and light this time. many people see darkness as evil...so I turned the concept on its head and decided to use it for good instead. I wouldn't say it's one of my best, but interpret it as you will.
Written September 28th, 2004
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I love it Hunny! Aw, it does my heart and eyes good to read your works again, you had and always have amazing talent in your poetry and THAT will always make your poetry beautiful. I like this unique perception on darkness....
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Okay, this is a great piece of work, of course and I'm glad you pointed this piece out to me.
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You are a true necromancer of the garrulous this was a pleasurable read.I am most covetous of your proficiency good luck very cool Cyber Artist
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Hi, very good , like this a lot, that should keep them busy for a bit, great write, all the best in the contest, hugs Di
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As, usual you are a master of linguistics. You craft a poem that puts some of us old people to shame. I like the power in this. I hope you felt a bit empowered yourself after writing this. I don't see how you could not. I felt empowered for you. This was intriguing from beginning to end. Now let me go get my direction and hope I know what I'm talking about
May God Bless you in all you do!
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You have such dramatic flair, EIQ, and such wonderful word choice. Permeating is such a fine word, and I don't hear it nearly enough! This is a very forceful, strong, and powerful piece. I enjoyed it.
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So Marvel Comics!!! I think you have a future in the comic book industry!! It's clear you have a flair for the dramatic, Xena the Warrior princess type of thing, lol. Honestly, I think the Ice Queen does it again!! Giving the competition the cold shoulder because they are so far off from where you are, keep writing!!
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Damn Good
Nice write though I felt it was not as capturing or vivid as the others I have read so far! It is still a great write, your style just draws the reader in as if you were telling a story!
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I found this very interesting! Whenever you create something with your poetic skill and talent, it can't be anything less than a masterpiece
I sure have missed reading your writes Sis, and its great to read your creativity and talent 
---Sara
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hi. i would say that some of these words such as do not fear me are often uttered by the ones we must fear the most, although i doubt that was in anyway hinted at i just kinda make stuff up. sorry i havent been on much of late, Jr. Year sux, no time. i really liked some of the rymes in this. ill try and keep up on more of your stuff.
P.S. what exactly are hellions? ive heard it used before but i dont know precisely, i assume demonic somethings...
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Absolutely beautiful language you've used here. It paints a perfect picture...and the scheme is well-thought out and even. I adore this piece. And thank you for your comment on mine.
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A wonderful poem with great imagery, I liked the way you spun the idea of darkness= evil, light= good on it's head- a little like Naughts and Crosses only more symbolic and a poem A great poem, keep writing because you're fantastic
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Once again you are amazing. The imagery in this is awesome.Any evil being daring to tread this path
Will meet certain defeat at my hand,
For all demons fear a minacious wrath
And search for escape by my command
This was aesome. These lines I was reading them and I was just like, whoa. This is a really good poem. Once again very good job. -
I like to think we have avengers taking care of evil. You can't have light without dark. This poem says that very well. Hey Roughrider does look good in the picture
just kidding. Your poems are always so deep and brilliant. Makes me want to try harder. Take care of yourself Queen
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I loved this poem. The entire concept, as you mentioned in your Author's Comments, was a unique one. I really enjoyed reading this. The flow was easier to follow on the second read-through, but I think that was because the first time I was concentrating on making sure I picked up every word. The imagery was beautiful and perfectly dark... I thought you balanced it all well. Also, I liked the idea of a dark angel being the one to conquer the creatures in the night. Good work here, rhyming was also superb. Keep it up!
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Good description, good write.
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Very nicely written. I liked this poem a lot. It does indeed remind me of cat woman and so does the piecture. This was definately unique. I liked it a lot. Keep up the good work.
Much love,
Kristen
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holy crap i loved this poem! it sorta reminds me of the movie cat women.... but none the less it had its own unique meaning as well! it was a very flowing and well develpoed poem and i can tell you put alot of heart and time into it!
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that's cool. well spoken. cool background. sounds like a huffy avenger to me. somnolent dormancy... like that.
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It is fun to take a trip to the dark side ever so often. Good for us to write about everything. This is good, lovely little journey, grabs the reader and takes them with it.
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I have no idea what you DO consider you best young miss but this far exceeds anything I could ever even hope to attempt at this point. You are a most intelligent and gifted woman. Be proud of that and never apologize for work such as this.
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Very good, some beautiful words were used in a perfect and elequont fashion, it was sexual and kinda dirty, which I like Very well written and kinda fun too. Liked the structure, liked the work
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Well, if it's not one of your best it certainly deserves honorable mention or runnre up status. I thought the whole piece was very well done. And I must tell you that this is the first poem I've read on this site that has made me look up THREE words in the same poem. And after I looked them up I was further satisfied to see that they were well used. Nice job.
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Wow, that was EXCELLENT! Great vocabulary and you rhymed throughout the entire thing. I wish I could write a poem that is this deep. Very powerful, great write. Keep up the good work!
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Bravo
First who said you could use my picture, I do look kinda sexy there... OK now to your amazing write, I like this a good dark kinda thing. I would like to have and avenger on myside. My darling sister you have a gift for writing someday when I get as old as you I hope to be as great as YOU!
Love you sis,
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I do not see the dark as an evil (not necessarily anyway) The is so much of the human condition that is hidden within in the shadow…the place of calm, quiet and stillness, the contemplative aspect of BE-ing that allow us to prevail when other means have been exhausted. It is the raw instinctual part of us that pre-dates our own thoughts and attitudes. It always stays back, until needed for survival or self preservation. You have captured something i’ve wanted to be able to say for a long Long time. Excellent writing and a a very worthwhile exploration. Blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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