'Ring the bell chimes,'
cries the puppet master,
'Listen, as they dawn the new age'
A single breath deepens the ambiance
'Follow me,'
instructs a faceless man,
'As we capsize the present and begin
the decoration of an alter for the new found era.'
The step of anarchy leads all
'Ignore the foolish that upset the wise,
for they are separate from us,'
demands the rioters.
Mocked is the one who chose to stand alone
Ridiculed for having had once thought
it was his choice
And so, the phoenix rises
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Written September 27th, 2004
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i love the last line 'and so the pheonix rises...
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I love this. I agree it is short and direct and the sudden ending makes the poem go out with bang. Amazing write.
~Amanda~
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oh baby i love this, got go right now i will add more but i just wanted to five you imedate gratification
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I love this poem. It's short and direct, while still not spelling everything out for the reader. You allow us to take the twists and turns you've presented here and run with it any which way we can, and that's appreciated. Beautiful write. The last line, although seeming sudden to end that way, was perfect! The suddenness just seems to make the poem end with a big bang, and that's as it should be.
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awesome. purely awesome. the last line is perfect. I'm incoherent I love it so much.
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