I sit and wonder..why...
is it that you like to make me cry?
make me feel like I wanna die.
wondering if your love was a lie.
I know I broke it off,
made it come to an end,
that didn't mean I didn't want you as a friend.
why'd our friendship have to end?
why did you ask what his name was?
there wasn't another at the time.
you were the one who had another
you'd found someone else,
you were happy together..
when you told me,
you'd wanted to break it off,
that you'd already found her,
i was torn apart,
like I rebroke my heart.
I still remember,
after my stupid mistake,
me you were still willing to take,
we had our up's
and also our down's.
but I still wish you were around.
It pains me to know,
that you hate me so,
you deny that you do,
yet you refuse to talk.
I wish you wouldn't do this,
it's you that I can't help but miss,
can you please give me one last call?
I wish to talk to you again..
I wish you were still my friend.
Why did it just have to end...
Author notes
makes no sense.. but just thoughts.. dedicated to Dan....
Written September 26th, 2004
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I know exactly what the feeling was, I've been there my dear and God it hurts...Well, aside from I could very well relate, this is just great, I loved every inch of what you have written.
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good write d00dette hope things get better
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i also didnt think the writing was too much, it was just fine, and this was a great write.
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*hugs you tight* this was a good poem, i didn't think the rhyming was too much, but i do enjoy structure with my rhyme, either rhyme consistently or don't rhyme(again, just my opinion) and it doesn't detract from the quality of the poem any, the majority of me liking a poem or not is the content and the words chosen, not what rules it follows, so all in all, i really liked this poem
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i like your poem, I think the rhyming can get a little too much, but I love what you are trying to convey. I have been there before. Guys named Dan can be dicks..lol..just a coincidence cuz my guy was named Dan too. Good Luck.
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