lost in a flame..
dieing in shame
fighting enticing light...
making my life turn bright.
engulfed in fire
burning passionate desire
dancing in the dark
giving life that new spark.
seeking for air..
breathing to be there
trying to survive
in this ever-crying life
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Though I have the feeling it is not quite finished yet, I couldn't come up with more and had the urge to post it..
Saturday 25th September 2004 between 23h00 and 00h00 GMT+1, at home
Filip H.F. "FiXato" Slagter
Written September 25th, 2004
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beautifull it lefted me speachless
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i feel some kinda hm..as if something tried to suffocate you..grabbed your throut and wanted to suck life from you...and you.. weak there.. trying to fight with your heart..
hope you wont feel it again..
some unfinished things are better than finished ones..at least the reader may add in his mind something more... you just encourage people to think in some direction.. from you perspective.. and it is difficult to make people look in the same direction..
btw. love is not when 2 people are looking at eachother with plentiful of passion and feelings towards themselves but love is when they can look in the same direction..- these r not my words.. its quotation. but I don;t remeber who said it..
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This is very sensual, full of love and longing. I like this "seeking for air..breathing to be there". That line is almost spiritual and shows how deep you can truly feel. This is lovely! I applaud you on this!
~Lyrical
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if you feel you need to finish it somehow, then i say go ahead, but i think it's wonderful just the way it is
i like the rhyme scheme as well, and i congratulate you on a great write.
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nice rhyme scheme, the flow was effortless. as always .. your write hit home and made me blame those damn allergies again (if u get what i mean haha) beautiful Fil, simply beautiful
! and tons of hugs
Lori
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